|Reviews for Ballerina Vampires tiptoeing through the halls of the Mansion|
| AquariusGirl230191 chapter 1 . 10/10/2012
I like the way you present your poetry, like the stanzas and lines all being different lengths - it makes it interesting to look at. For example:
for further instruction"
I enjoyed your poem, although will admit that I was a bit confused by it's subject to begin with. As I progressed though I think (well hope) that I understood what you were trying to put across (jealousy, envy, growing up amongst your peers in the dancing world) if that's correct. I also got that the narrator didn't want to be like the others to succeed but by the final stanza "we all whore ourselves, in one fashion, or another" I felt as if maybe she had changed to be successful.
Maybe I misunderstood your intentions but that is how it came across to me. Regardless, it was an enjoyable read.
I like the way you use language to describe things, like for example the phrase:
"frost-bitten moonlight" - is just so beautiful.