Reviews for Sewer Children
steph135 chapter 1 . 10/9/2012
hey! this sounds pretty interesting. great hook in the begining to! you said in the authors note that it's overused. maybe the sewer part is, but i think the whole taking-down-the-dictator part mixed in with that makes it pretty original lol. keep on going! :P
-steph135
SpookyPainter chapter 1 . 10/8/2012
This is a great start, I love where you are going with this. However there are a few things you may want to consider. First off, your setting would be a wonderful thing to develop a little further. This gives the reader more sense as to where they are and what is going on. It also seems to be the backdrop to the story itself. Describing the setting also tells you what kind of conditions they are living in and would further your story a great bit. Your characters are interesting and do seem to leap to life as you describ them. However I suggest that you take the bottom bit and insert something similar into the beginning that way the readers know more as to why these children are in the Sewers and why they are blowing up the warehouse. It's an awesome idea to introduce them at the start because them they will become even more alive. I absolutely love your idea and where it is going. All you need to do is tinker with it a bit and you'll have a gem. Write on!