|Reviews for Pavement Dream|
| Mylilblackpen chapter 1 . 10/11/2012
Well this has just left me gobsmacked! Well and truly gobsmacked. I just think this is perfection at its finest. I don't think I've ever read something like that, ever.
The imagery was stunning because the first and second stanza seem comforting and almost motherly with it's soft and positive imagery. However, as we move to the last stanza all of that falls apart; it's almost as if you took that positive imagery and ripped it up along with my heart because by golly it was emotional! I really liked it and I just felt so sorry for the speaker and her/his child. I could just imagine a mother saying this to her young child. Wow. Just wow.
I have no criticism, just praise for this piece. The emotion comes through crystal clear along with the powerful imagery!
| AppleCrumble chapter 1 . 10/11/2012
I liked it! The descriptions were good. I've never read something like this.
Loved the line 'rats are our stars in the sky' and the concept of the sirens singing a lullaby is a brilliantly unique idea. Great poem!