Reviews for Untitled
Guest chapter 1 . 11/18/2012
Overall an interesting story. I think it does flow nicely, the setting and characters are well established and I think you did a good job of slowly building up the tension and the realization that this Aria girl is a crazy person!
Personally I find Caroline's immediate reaction of 'its late and I need to go' to be a bit of an overreaction. I can certainly imagine a person feeling uneasy, and even scared in that situation, though I think they might not immediately get up and leave, but that's more subjective and obviously depends on the character.
Anyway, it was interesting, I liked it.