|Reviews for What Mercreatures Dream Of|
| Beautifully Corrupted chapter 1 . 11/24/2012
Okay so... I really like this one it is really original! And this might seem a little bit mean but it was written to help improve your writing!
First at the beginning when you were explaining everything, it was really...blunt... and a little bit boring try to add more detail when you do things like that.
Furthermore when you write try not to do it in really chunky paragraphs because that leads people to skipping ahead to see when it gets more interesting.
Other than that I really like the character development so far! I love Niko and her spunky yet strangely kind attitude and I can't wait for you to develop the story more! Please update soon!
| Swallow-tailed Kite chapter 1 . 10/11/2012
So far, can't see major problems with this fix. Update soon :]