I just finished reading this, and let me say, you did a great job.
Cheers and keep writing!

Although I was skeptical at first, I was delighted to find this story has a lot of potential. You have a wonderful gift for humor, shown best when Jack and Lex argue. But you really need to work on writing. Readers can't understand what's happening when you skip a lot of details and just write the best bits. You need to practice presentation too- you can't just write in chunks like this. You need to get your characters more established too- it's best for the reader to figure out what kind of a person a character is from dialogue instead of being told directly in the narration.
Don't get bummed out by this though- I'm giving you sincere advice because I like your ideas and dialogue. You've got talent, it just needs to be polished.
For now, I suggest getting a Beta and reading '200 things you should know about writing'
Best of luck!

It all makes sense in the end, although both of them were being idiots. Then again, maybe it is like that often when two people who have known each other since childhood struggle with new feelings. A fun read. Thank you.

If he cares about her, then why isn't he trying to win her heart instead of going out with other girls? That makes no sense.

It seems that they've opened a whole can of worms. Then again, perhaps her mother suspects the truth and is trying to railroad them together before they can catch a breath... in the hope that over time it will become a real match.
Jack's reaction was interesting. I wonder if he even remembers how he treated Alex back in the past.

It seems pretty obvious that Jack is already serious and Alex is oblivious (just as it is totally unecessary for me to point this out to you). I am curious about what she truly looks like. Her self-image is terrible, but is her self-description correct?

Strong men and strong women often have weak children... and more often then not, it is the parent's fault. They are so domineering, so itimidating, that the children learn to fear and cower and submit... which suits the parent up until the point when they suddenly expect that child to be just like them... and then it is the child's fault... because, of course, it couldn't possibly be the fault of the infallible parent, right?

An enticing first chapter. I will read on.

Enjoyed this sweet story!

The Jack POV part is just totally heart warming! I am a sucker for mush and corny lines! This chapter is too good! Well done! :)

I'm sooooo pleased with this chapter - great job! And, congratulations on the ummm, y'know (not going to jinx it either).

Awesome! I can't wait to see how their talk goes.

Ugh thnk you! I've been wondering what you've been doing. Thnk u for not canceling!

Oh my god! I've been waiting for the day jack finally says that he loves and wants her! Pls keep updating!

I love it! Not too sappy or too much too soon - it's perfect! And don't feel pressured to make the story much longer; once you're pleased with how things progress in a particular space of time then it's fine. I also think that if you make it too long then it might not be as humorous but instead tedious.

Ahhhhhhhh... WHY CAN'T THEY JUST ADMIT THEY LOVE EACH OTHER?!