Reviews for The Sanity Show
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 22 . 6/10/2013
Oops... I sorta forgot about this... Anyway, amazing chapter! :d things are definitely quite mysterious... if I were her, I wouldn't trust anyone... they all seem to have these alternate sides to their personalities, and she's all too trusting...
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXx
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 20 . 5/7/2013
Amazing chapter! That was so touching! I love how his ghost appeared to her more than once in a ... sort of physical form. ;) It made his loss so much more realistic, because I think somewhere deep down she was depending on him being there with her; even though he'd died, he wasn't really gone in her mind because she could still talk to him.
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXx
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 19 . 5/4/2013
Amazing chapter! I think her age is shown more here... she's experiencing new things that everyone else would have learned long before. It would definitely be interesting to here about Alex's story... where he's from, how he achieved immortality, how he seems more evil than Zeno said he was when they met... it's all so fascinating.
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXx
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 18 . 5/1/2013
Amazing chapters! Sorry for not reviewing in so long! I can see that they've been edited. I still have some things that confuse me though...
some words are still off... it's like where you wrote the wrong word in some places, like I think once you wrote "and" when you meant "an", just things like that.
Some of your paragraphs are still in the present tense. I can understand why some sentences are, but it's paragraphs with action (well I wouldn't call it action, but you know what I mean).
Your time seems to jump around quite a bit... it's probably just the dreams, but it throws me off sometimes. Just these random flashes from different points in time... they're diary entries but I think she also calls them dreams... I'm really confused. Other than that, I can follow just fine.
Sorry for the criticism. I'm picky with those kinds of things. Anyway, a beta reader might help you to fix the tiny things that slip through the cracks when you proof-read your own work.
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXx
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 10 . 3/19/2013
Amazing few chapters! You certainly have added some more scenes to the story. Wow. I can't wait to read more!
Keep up the amazing wirk! :) (:
Tarah xXx
BloodWillSpill chapter 1 . 1/18/2013
I really like this first chapter because it promises a great story. I actually like twisted circuses so this was right up my ally!
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 26 . 12/27/2012
Amazing chapter! Did she just passs on like the other people before her? OMG... I can't wait to see what happens!
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXx
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 25 . 12/25/2012
Amazing chapter! I wonder if it was or wasn't a good idea to open up to the interrogation officer? I suppose we'll have to find out. It's sort of sad that she's treated like trash, but I guess I understand why. She's supposedly a criminal or something...
Happy holidays! :)
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXx
Guest chapter 24 . 12/20/2012
Update soon!
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 24 . 12/20/2012
Amazing chapter! I don't understand why she wouldn't want her old appearance back. I mean I sort of do, but... I wonder how they'll get out?
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXx
Long-live-MaxRide-TMI-TID-HP chapter 24 . 12/20/2012
Holy Shizzz! That was wonderful (in a depressing way.) Wow great job.
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 23 . 12/18/2012
Amazing story so far! When I first started reading it, I found that it jumped around a lot and that made it hard to follow the timeline sometimes. I'm really interested now though. I hope you update soon!
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXx
Long-live-MaxRide-TMI-TID-HP chapter 22 . 12/9/2012
Yes! The great escape! Update soon!
Aleatoric chapter 1 . 12/8/2012
Ch 1:

"whether one has a good life or not Anyway, one day,"
Missing a period.

"we talked to whoever we pleased,"
Change "whoever" to "whomever"

"I stand there and stare at Spike,"
Change this to say "I stood there and stared at Spike,"

"back in the thirties he was a gangster, that was how I loved him."
Change "was" to "why"

"always in a business like mood."
Insert a "-" between "business" and "like"

"I only know one act and the one I know isn't sick, in fact it's quite boring considering I have done it so many times."
You changed into italics font midsentence, does that mean only part of the sentence is her thinking? You may want to add "as she thought to herself," or something of that sort.

"I stood outside the fabric tent and listened in;"
Take out "in"

"A mysterious person said; I had never heard this voice before"
Missing a period at the end.

"White orbs began to emerge from the palms of her hands until they began lightning strikes."
Replace "began" with "became"

"leaving the dying people in the audience to fend for them."
Change "them" to "themselves."

"performing it ever again; there was no way I ever wanted too…"
Change "too" to "to."

"me killed so there would be room for someone less rebelish."
Exchange "rebelish" for "rebellious."

"All of my costumes were pixie type outfits with a skirt made of triangle fabric of different colors."
Reword to "pixie-type" and "triangular fabrics"

"When I finished getting ready clothes wise"
Add a "-" between "clothes" and "wise"

Interesting story concept so far. Be careful of petty grammar and punctuation errors, though.
Long-live-MaxRide-TMI-TID-HP chapter 21 . 12/7/2012
HOLY SHIT! That was so ever frickin awesome! That was Walking Dead Finale good! Update soon!
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