Reviews for When Time Relieves
AxeMurderingAxolotl chapter 1 . 10/15/2012
This was... interesting. I'm not sure I get the concept of it. Is it forgiveness? I found the choking a bit disturbing... but good writing :).
VelvetyCheerio chapter 1 . 10/14/2012
Review courtesy of the Review Marathon. Link in my profile!

I love the imagery in this. The movement of the baby girl is almost mechanical in my eye and it's creepy in a "I can't look away" type situation. The verbs used really helped bring out the visualisation, though. They were chosen well. There's something about the word "grinding" and "slapped" that jumps out at me and makes the piece feel more real.

I also really liked the strangeness of the whole piece. It was like a brief glimpse at a different world, where anything is possible. I was so scared from the outset when I realized this man had strangled a little girl, but then she started to come back to life and I kind of had to take a step back, haha. It was very fun, though, especially the ending. It was beautiful.

Excellent work. :)

Ophelia Schmit chapter 1 . 10/13/2012
Confusing and odd to me, but I'm sure that others will not be as dumb as me in understanding.