|Reviews for Penelope & Charlotte|
| lexiemcsteamy chapter 1 . 10/16/2012
Overall, I think you did a good job writing this. The biggest suggestion I have is scene breaks. Put lines, dashes, etc. between the scene changes. Without them, it's a little confusing. If this site works the same as ff . net, there is a button you can press to put an entire line between the scene changes.
Your writing style is good. You did a good job writing the dialogue, which some people really have trouble with.