Reviews for Phantom's Story
360pages chapter 2 . 4/17
Just a heads up, you just have to use italics for thoughts. Usually most people can get that it's in someone's head. Like using bold for a written document is also good, though it can get kind of muddled using what font for what situation.

Also, you do a pretty good job of getting the characters emotions down. Though once again there is a lot of names and connections that people have to understand and absorb from the second chapter.
Bastard From North chapter 24 . 4/14
Well, that didn't gain attention at all...
Maybe Orchid should help Yuki with the ice powers :D
If he keeps freezing everything up, that just might get
some attention :D
And maybe somehow figure out how Rena and Yuki would come
along better, sword fight might gain attention s well XD
Bastard From North chapter 23 . 4/7
So that's why it is called Phantom's story :D
I was wondering where the name came from besides
your account name :D
You better keep that promise Yuki/Phantom and Jet/Rena, it's
rude to break promises so no regrets XD
But the whole love thing from previous chapter, "they escaping as
lovers " is actually a great cover :D
See ya again! :)
Bastard From North chapter 22 . 4/7
Wait, two chapters? O.o Did I miss one
chapter at some point? O.O
Or did you update two chapters at same time? :D
So it wasn't Yuuna after all... And I was so sure it was
Yuuna who was with Orchid as well XD
Can't remember Rena that well though O.o
Anyways, a great chapter again :D
360pages chapter 1 . 4/5
This is pretty good, you give the readers enough to know the characters. But not too much that it feels like an info dump. However I'm confused on why Ghassan killed Caiden, it felt like there was no build up to it. And I'm still confused about why?
Bastard From North chapter 21 . 3/8
Daaamn memory... I can't remember Mia :O
So, Yuuna likes him back after all... Or was that just some kind of good bye thing? :D
I think he shouldn't feel upset of that, Ghassan was person and not hi property after all XD
Great chapter Phantom :)
Bastard From North chapter 20 . 1/25
Just like Orchid said, leave nothing unsaid :D
I bet the next chapter will be interesting! :O And it
really surprised me that he wants to go with
Orchid :D
And who is this mysterious apprentice? :D
Great work Phantom! :)
Bastard From North chapter 19 . 12/26/2014
Ice sword! O.O I wanna ice sword :O
That would be cool :D
I like Orchid :3 He has a sword and he is bad ass,
no need to say more :D And he kinda has some kind
of pride or honor thing going on :D
Great chapter! :)
Work-in-progress519 chapter 19 . 12/21/2014
Well that was a big turn of events.
Taking a step back from the rest of the story I really liked the part with Yuki's ice sword following Orchid crushing the top half, it was written very skillfully, it gave me a very clear, and vivid image when I read it the way you wrote that piece *Round of appluase*
Bastard From North chapter 18 . 11/17/2014
Orchid, you betrayed me :O
I though the guy was going to be good guy :(
So unfair :D But he has a giant sword :3
I wonder how long Yussel can keep that act up?
Knowing that some one is dead and people looking for that
guy... It can't be easy :/
( Didn't realize this was updated until now :D )
Work-in-progress519 chapter 18 . 11/16/2014
:( I already felt bad for Yuki, but now this, Orchid may not know who he is, but that would be downright terrifying
Work-in-progress519 chapter 17 . 11/14/2014
It's good that itzal's alive, I'm really excited to read more :)
Bastard From North chapter 17 . 11/14/2014
Damn, I really need to do something with my memory xD
I can't remember surely who was who but what I think was going on
was that Itzal drank some water that made you immortal or cold dead corpse?
Well it seems he survived :D And the Zak was some suspicious snake boy :D
Bastard From North chapter 16 . 9/3/2014
Ghassan kinda had it coming, like karma :P But hen again he was trying to fix things if I am right.
And dead can't talk or walk until the hell is full :D Or some one invents device how to bring back dead :P Good luck with that
I wonder how this turns out? :P
Sorry for late reviews, I was kinda lazy :D
Work-in-progress519 chapter 16 . 9/2/2014
Yuki writing those numbers in the phone book for Ghassan is going to be desperately sad later on... T.T
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