Reviews for A Day in the Life of Annabeth in the Israelite Camp
Lunicole chapter 1 . 10/17/2012
It was well-paced, short and sweet, with the right amount of dialogue and description. I really liked it. I hope you had a good mark on it, because it was very nice !
Guest chapter 1 . 10/15/2012
I really liked reading this, too bad you don't want to make it a multi chapter story. It seemed like a really good start!
steph135 chapter 1 . 10/16/2012
Hey great job. The descriptions were awesome! I have never found a old biblical story on here eather so this is pretty cool. I found one grammar mistake (I make these all the time, don't worry) in the fourth to the last paragraph you said "she" when it should be uppercase. That's all though. Thank you for sharing this with us! :P
Steph135
Sakura-Cherry1 chapter 1 . 10/15/2012
It's interesting, that's for sure! I haven't actually read any religious stories before on this site, so this is a first. Also a bit of grammar aid, her name is Annabeth, right? In paragraph 5, you use the term Annabelle, when she describes the tent. I think that's the only error I caught. Anyway, great job!