|Reviews for A Cold Walk|
| kunoichi-socks chapter 1 . 10/21/2012
"As the sun sleeps, so much people. Such things as light bulbs and caffeine try to keep people from their sleeping." This is awkward and grammatically incorrect. It's okay to have fragments in creative pieces, but this fragment doesn't serve any purpose and distracts from the good quality of your work.
Your second last paragraph was uncomfortable for me. The repetition of the word 'tree' could be replaced with a metaphor of some sorts - a sad old man perhaps? If you gave this tree some kind of character, you could really make this pop out at the reader.
Other than that, this was very well written. Your point was very clear and it drew very brief attention to what humans have done to this world. Your point was clear and you created a wonderfully somber atmosphere. Great writing!