Reviews for A Runaway Love Story
SuperGirlOnToast chapter 1 . 11/2/2012
Lovely jubbly! Remember SPEECH MARKS though. For example:
..Hello, Harvey's window cleaning services. How can I help you?
Lola gazed out of the window slowing blowing a pink bubble from her chewing gum to bursting point. She sucked it in, and listened to the monotone voice that answered her.
Yup I can fit you in tomorrow at 5:00. That OK?
Cool, see you then."
IT SHOULD BE LIKE THIS:
"..Hello, Harvey's window cleaning services. How can I help you?"
Lola gazed out of the window slowing blowing a pink bubble from her chewing gum to bursting point. She sucked it in, and listened to the monotone voice that answered her.
"Yup I can fit you in tomorrow at 5:00. That OK?
Cool, see you then."
And, just an idea, put the song lyrics in italics. And Skyfall is one word (Check the lyrics!)
Like the idea, just don't lose the grammar. No body, lik want to red a stor lie this cos noone checke it.
Little Miss Toastie
SuperGirlOnToast chapter 3 . 10/29/2012
I LOVE THIS SO MUCH IT'S UNBEARABLE but not in a lezzie way. Haha Georgia Nicholsen quotes *nerdy giggle*.
CanOnlyBeMyself chapter 1 . 10/28/2012
Omg that was really more plzz
UnpredictableMe chapter 2 . 10/26/2012
okay what does she tell adelle? update please!
UnpredictableMe chapter 1 . 10/26/2012
WOW! interesting can't wait to read the second chapter!happy writing!
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