I love this! Couldn't put it down, not even the massive headache I had held me back from reading. This story is so intense and full of emotion. Can't wait for more!

This story is so great. I can totally feel the emotions. And super hot too, of course. I don't see phone sex scene very often and they happen to be one of my favorite things and this one was soooo good! Love this story and can't wait for more.

Man... so Trey is becoming a pretty bad father. But to be honest, his 'tough' fathering really bothers me anyways.

It's good of you to make Julie seem so great while doing the same for Kevin. It makes it all stressful, but enjoyable, to watch.

I don't know, it's hard for me to talk about this stuff. It's not that I'm feeling depressed, it's just that I feel so much further from FP than I did before. You know? So I'm sorry I don't have all this great feedback to give.

I'll still keep reading though. You are a good writer, see, so even when I'm not into FP I want to read your story.

I was so happy to see you'd updated XD
And ohmygosh, what a roller coaster at the end! I loved it.
The phone sex was so hot and then so sad. I was so happy Trey had called him though. And I feel I understand Julie a little better this chapter, she seems more fallible and human and relatable. I was a little confused about the seven years thing as I though Ash was five ( I'm just assuming that though, I haven't checked) and they didn't get together until Julie was pregnant, but if he's nearly six, I guess that would make it seven years- I'm probably thinking too hard about this:P

Haha we have Mint Thins in England which are chocolates (with mint in:P) and my brain just wouldn't read Thin Mints:P

Sukix

Okay, you have to update this shit.

Because it is brilliant.

And I am in love.

Sweeet!
While reading this story, you've pulled my heart, stitch it back, then ripped them apart, stuffed it back inside, the list still goes on... And might include some explosive, perhaps with splatter of gooey substance..
Wish you a good day/weekend.
Best regard,
val

Hey man, good chapter. The beginning is great, with the thunder and lightning, the way you ease into the story by talking about how Trey sleeps. And then, of course, the drama of Ash finding out. That is deeply dramatic just as a scenario, and you milk it for all its worth. You bring out the best in the situation. Overall, this section is just stellar.

Things get a little duller when he's talking to Kevin in the bedroom. It feels... obligatory, like you are doing it because you have to and not because you want to. Maybe this is the part where you'd painted yourself into a corner?

But then once we get to the showering part we're back on track. I like that you really pulled out the deepest strands of the characters' lives so easily here. The deep self-loathing they both deal with comes out without contrivance. It feels raw, and it feels real.

Now we're left with a complicated situation. I don't know which direction you'll go with the story - Ash talking to his mother, Kev or Trey not being able to stay away from each other, or something else. I don't know if we've seen the bottom of the trouble or if things are going to get much worse before they get better, if they get better. I hope Trey can find a healthy relationship, with Kevin or with anyone... so we'll see.

So this really is a good chapter: the prose was just right, the contents were mostly riveting, and you've left a lot of options to keep moving ahead. I think you can be proud of this chapter.

This chapter was amazing; it was written well and still fit into everything going on too. A chapter like this is well worth the wait that it took for you to write it. I do hope that Trey will get a happy ending to all this and that somehow him and Kev can be together properly without anything too bad happening.

Really looking forward to the next chapter. Take all the time you need but please don't leave the story unfinished x

OMG. I am hooked on this story.. I actually cried when I started reading it. Your character development is soo good. You can really relate to all of them. Please Keep writing!

Gosh.

How do you do it? You have this talent for making me feel so many things at once. For someone who says you don't like really sad stuff, you sure can make me really sad! (In a good way? I think?)

Honestly though, I wish I had suggestions. But I can't even tell what would be good in this situation. I obviously want happiness for all characters involved (including Julie). But how would that even be possible? An arrangement where they divorce but live next door to each other so they don't need to worry about custody, and Trey and Kev can be together and Julie can do what she will? Only in a perfect world.

Hearts,
M

That's so sad...
Finally found love, but it can't be...
I would be happy, if Julie has her lover and agrees that her husband has his, everyone would be fine. Just explaining it to Ash would be tough

Awesome chapter! XD And I really enjoyed Trey's inner battling, how he was mean and didn't want to be, and how young and then how mature Kevin was acting.
It doesn't feel like directionless. It feels like you're moving toward an ending that has Trey wanting to have a relationship with Kevin and getting the knots he's tied in with Julia sorted out- even if Trey thinks that would be bad for the kids, he could come to the conclusion that seeing their parents in a loveless relationship is far worse.

I hope you're feeling more inspired again. [Oh and I'm interested to hear what the original outline was too,) ]

Sukix

I'm back and so are you Oh my goodness...you just about killed me with this chapter. I felt fear with Trey when Ash saw Kevin. I felt anger,confusion and defeat in Kevin and Trey during Trey's first reaction. You made me cry, that's how eloquent and raw you expressed the desperation and need for love during the intimate moments. You are killing me with how amazingly you develop your characters! Thanks for the update, I eagerly await the next one. (Psst...I want Kevin and Trey to be together :D the hopeless romantic that you've made me with this piece)

Wow! You're a really strong author. I connect very well to your characters, especially Trey. Haha. I guess that can be expected considering he's the protagonist. You should definitely keep writing. :)

This is still excellent, and I don't know how long it's been since I've reviewed but, like, I went MIA for a while but now I'm here again and catching up on reading and things and I still love this story! We all have those days when we don't feel like we can write, whether at all or a certain story, and it's totally understandable. I'm glad you're going to finish this though, because I love it! I love your characterization, and the emotional/psychological growth that we see throughout the story. It's all very real and believable and I'm enjoying it - I can't wait to see how everything plays out!