Ah, this is great, I actually can't wait to see what's going to happen when Kevin arrives! XD I like hating Julie, it's weird but it feels good, it's as though I feel like she's going to get what she deserves.

Sukix

ps. Europe XD exciting! For Christmas?

Julie is such a bitch! But, exactly, the nerve she had to bring the person she is cheating with home.

Can't wait to see what happens between Trey and Kevin.

Good work!

I like where this story is going! I would hope we meet Kevin in the future? ;)

Thank you for another quick and long update! It was really interesting to read what's going on in Trey's head after the whole 'incident' with Kevin. I thought the part about him wanting intimacy with Julie when she was pregnant was especially effecting (not sure if that's a word, but just trying to say it was well done : )). I was a bit surprised that Trey came to the rather quick conclusion that he was going to confront Julie about her suspected affair. I guess that was mostly/partly Kevin's influence, though it doesn't really seem like that good of an idea to me, as the chance of Julie getting defensive when confronted seems pretty high. To me, divorcing would make more sense for both of them (or Trey at least), but what do I know. At any rate, the next few days in their household will be interesting! I'm glad to see Kevin is still having a positive effect on Trey (at the end).
I'm basically obsessed with this story... I wish there were more (m/m) stories like this out there. Anyway, as always, can't wait for more!

after the really long one, I decided to postpone the sequel to read something shorter.
Poor Trey!
But hey, they are not too fat apart agewise...
I'm really looking forward to the next part..

And, yeah, Julie is awful!

This story is got to be the most amazing story I have ever read. I love it, I mean like I was up all night reading this, my mom found me pass out with the laptop on my chest. I found it very refreshing and real life. Trey situation was very understanding but with Julia, it seems that she will soon take Ash away, Kevin seems to have an understanding with Trey, since he must be able to tell a alone person in desperate need of help. I really wish this story was a novel since i would love to continue reading.

I do hope you will continue to update soon; since this is a great story, I couldn't turn my head away since it was eye catching, I do hope the process between Trey and Kevin begins to blossom soon.

Really amazing, awesome, great story, so please update soon.

I am still loving this! also, I don't think I mentioned this before, but I adore your chapter titles, too. Like - titles of anything, I have such a hard time coming up with, so that's why I name my stories dumb things and leave the chapters just "Chapter 1" "Chapter 2" etc etc, and I totally admire people who come up with quirky creative chapter titles! Like you! Like, every time, I see the chapter title and I'm just wondering what that's even going to have to do with the story, and then I get it, and it's the best.

...but, yeah, appreciative chapter title rambling aside, I'm loving this! I'm loving the progression of things between Kevin and Trey, and I think you're pacing things really well. And I love how all of the details you include about Trey's past all provide us with more insight into his character; it's all compelling and interesting and great. I can't wait to see how things will turn out with Julie as this progresses :)

Ah this was a great chapter! I know I've said it before, but I really love the slow prgression, how you're leading us seamlessly on to each event and I'm excited. It's so perfectly contained, it almost reminds me of a play- I see Trey and his kids tormentedly stuck in the house (which is the set) and the other characters come on and off stage, because Trey has given up all his power to walk away, but slowly as the story progresses he begins to gain some of it back- haha that's probably weird and I'm not sure how well I'm explaining myself XP

Anyway, I can't wait for more

Sukix

Oh my gosh, Kevin's constant apologizing reminds me of my Drew but in a different, less tragic way. It's more adorable here.

I can't even imagine how awkward that would be to get past. The kiss thing. Especially when it's tied emotionally to feeling wanted again. That's tough.

Yikes...idk how next chapter is gonna go. I hope he does confront Julie...but I hope there's not a huge blowout and that's the only way I can see that sort of accusation going. Maybe Kevin can help Trey get through it. And I really hope Ash handles everything okay. Kids are precious. I have a lot of feels right now.

Well, I'm in class so I have to stop! Ta-ta.

Hearts,
Maggie

Oh my... I'm nervously anticipating now if and how the talk with Julie will go.

Great chapter! Wonderful chapter! I'm having fun over here.

I love the explorations of male relationships you've got here. Like... Kyle and Kyle's dad, especially. Well, just the psychological exploration generally. You had some good psychological exposition here with Trey's past, Julie's sex-crying, and Kevin's apologizing. These are all really revealing and insightful, and they feel much less laboured or contrived than similar things in "More out of life".

Yeah. Over all, that's what has been so great about this chapter. 7000-odd words of psychological probity. I feel like that was sustained through this whole thing.

I don't see the need to limit the word count. I mean, the longer chapter the better. I don't like short chapter which are nothing but fillers.
I do think that you're right about the second part being a bit rushed though. But on the other hand, I'm an impatient person so when I read an unfinished story I almost want it to be a bit rushed because I cannot wait to find out what will happen next.
And well, you still write children really well, especially little brats ;).

Wow, what a good chapter! Bam! Excellent!

I like that this story is both heavier and lighter than "more out of life". (tell me if the constant comparisons are getting annoying.) It's heavier in the sense that I feel like we're dealing with meatier issues, like the suffering and pain of the characters is more real and unavoidable. But it's also less ostentatious. It's so oblique and subtle, you never belabour your points; so it comes off as having a light touch, of being funny one moment and serious the next. It makes "mool" look heavy-handed and melodramatic.

I take issue with that kitchen scene, the one where he just stands and thinks for several paragraphs. First, you don't really tell us anything new. A couple of new details about the past, but nothing we couldn't have guessed. For the most part it's only a summary of what we've learned so far. Any prolonged meditation that ends with the conclusion that nothing has changed, is a little suspicious. And then, you don't really go into the emotional aspect... his remembering and thinking on the Kyle subject later is the perfect example of when thoughts and memories are hand-in-hand with feelings. The whole telling of that part was emotional, was a dramatic movement. But there was no such movement in the kitchen monologue.

Anyway, all this is really exciting, because I know there's going to be lots of fall-out from this. Perhaps not much next chapter, who can say... but ultimately, yes, I think the main power and motivation of the plot will flow from this event; it's the catalyst.

Yay! Thank you for updating this so quickly! Personally, as a reader, there is no such thing as a chapter that's too long... And even though this chapter was nice and long, it still went by too quickly : ). A well done and interesting chapter as usual. Glad you made such good use of alcohol - what a handy device to move a relationship, and plot, along! I feel bad for Trey, and especially Kevin this time - I hope Trey doesn't let him fester in his guilt and embarrassment for too long. You do a great job of not neglecting the details... Anyway, I'm addicted to this story, so of course, always looking forward to more!

Oh I love Trey's internal struggle! I think I was probably as shocked as Trey when Kevin kissed him:) And their more uninhibited conversation was great.
I don't think it came off as rushed at all, and it works fine as it is, but if you were to think of changing anything, I could read more about how Trey felt in the time between being shocked and reaching the bedroom having quite liked the kiss actually;) But as I said it is a good chapter as it is, and I'm not sure how it would work split into two as it's a whole solid thing. And the thing is with this story, all your details are concerned with the immediate plot and are driving it forwards, especially in this chapter, so I think the 10000 word limit should be a bit elastic:)
Very much looking forward to more!
Sukix