The last two chapters have kinda confused me. It seem like it was rushed, from the ending of six to the sudden interrogation of seven all seemed a little rushed. A few spelling and grammar mistakes.

Also, Miraina is going insane, correct? I'm not sure.

wow, her thoughts had seriously turned from the beginning of this chapter to the end. It's amazing how the prologue from the beginning mixes with this chapter to help drive Miraina nearly insane. I love how you did that

I can tell this was a filler chapter, like you told me over PM's, but I think it was necessary for the story :) Please post more soon! Can't wait to see what happens next.

When I read the line, "It doesn't matter what you think she did. What matters is, you're not going to win.' I thought Miraina was talking. But then you followed with, 'We'll break you too – after you give yourself up. After you beg. Plead. Cry. You all give in in the end." on the same line. Who was talking? was it Miraina or the shady official guy?
The imaginary Dusky part was oddly uplifting, probably because Dusky is the only thing Miraina has left at the moment (if only in her mind). I really hate the System right now. They kill the citizens for thinking about the discrepancies of their life in the city?! What the heck. Please update soon! :)

Those random furry things sound extremely cute! :3 I hope an explanation for them comes soon, though. They materialized out of nowhere. Miraina sounds very sensible. If I was living in that world and I was seeing strange creatures, I wouldn't mention a damn thing. But Prei reminds me of Prim so much! :) I know this is stupid coming from me, but try to keep the length of the chapters constant. It makes for better reading. _

Damn, that was intense. I'm feeling a Hunger Games type theme to this story, especially when the Guardians sentenced them to be 'Competitors in the Arena'. I have to say, I laughed when I read the line about their number being 23D- that means that somewhere in this novel is the building 1D. I can just imagine a whole building full of one direction followers haha! That randomness aside, vocabulary was spot on and punctuation wasn't far behind. Good work :)

awww!
You were right when you told me this chapter was much darker than your previous chapters.
It was a little confusing to me at first, with the conversation between her and the interrogator, with the thoughts part. Could you explain the thoughts part more, tell why he could hear her thoughts in the future chapters? I think it'll make it a lot more confusing :)
But other than that, I really liked this chapter. You're good at writing dark scenes.
Please upload soon! or, whenever you can. Can't wait

I couldn't find anything out of whack, so I'll just write some pretty dot points on what I liked:
- How the MC obviously cares for her sister. (I'm a sap, I know)
- The suspenseful ending. (Even though fighting IS implied)

And less about the writing: I enjoy this genre. From what I've read, you write it pretty well. ;)

lol did you get this idea from the hunger games?

This is really good!

Ah, cliffhanger. I'm really sad about the death of Prie... I'm looking forward to seeing what Miraina finds out about her world. The harsh leaders seems a little bit like Hunger Games. Once again, the story is almost totally different to it, there are just some little aspects. However, most dystopian future is now a little bit like Hunger Games. Overall, really good!

The fluffy things are so cute! :3 At least, they are to me.
This chapter was really good, and I loved how Dusky could actually talk. I didn't know the fluffy things could speak until this chapter. or... maybe they did before and I just can't remember exactly...
Anyways, I found a couple small mistakes:
Knowing she was gone was not. - I feel like you mean Knowing she was gone, but not. I may be completely wrong, but the first version didn't make much sense.
He loved her mother because it was... - I think you mean She loved her mother.

Please update soon!

An extremely captivating story. Made me relate quite a bit to Hunger Games but with quite a big twist. You've managed to capture your characters extremely well too. looking forward to your updates.
xxx

This is interesting so far! It's very good dystopian fiction, it's sick and twisted in a very unique way. The idea of the story if very original, but I feel like I'm reading maybe a little bit of a Hunger Games type story, with the arenas and all, but it's still very good and original. I'll read more when I have time.

awww! poor Prei! She didn't deserve that!

...sadness...god, that hurt to read...poor Prei...oh, what's going to happen next? :o

Wolfy