|Reviews for Bullshit|
| Krystal Watters chapter 1 . 10/31/2012
Too short... I have a little bit of characterization about the teacher, but not very much about the main character or the girl. And why would the girl be sent outside when it was the student disrespecting the teacher?
If you expand the start of the conflict, rather than just the worst part of it, we can get a better picture of all of the players, and even some of the other students depending on how the rest of the class reacts: do they condemn the student? do they mumer in silent fear? do they join in and then quickly shut up?
And a slight bit of grammar: you don't need a page break when you say "five minutes later" in my oppinion.
| physics223 chapter 1 . 10/30/2012
A bit more fleshing out would probably do wonders for your story, but as a vignette it's quite well-done.