Reviews for Swords
peacekaylae chapter 2 . 8/18/2013
It was s little hard to read, like for example those two times when Shawn said two things one right after the other. You could have made it easier to read by making it into one sentence. Also try to express his emotion a little differently it's a bit confusing and awkward. Hope this makes little tips at least!_
peacekaylae chapter 1 . 8/18/2013
So far so good!:) keep up the great work and I like the character description except for not knowing Claire's hair color oh well _
MimiTheAwesomeness chapter 4 . 4/4/2013
Good job ma brother! You are really developing a story here :)
AoideMythos chapter 4 . 3/18/2013
Make sure you proof read too! Don't always rely on your editor. XD
Otherwise, this was good. Update soon!
Qouc Minh chapter 3 . 2/2/2013
Sorry im slow got alot of school work
Guest chapter 3 . 1/25/2013
I feel bad that Shawn has to fight Hamon, but surely Shawn will win.
I'm rooting for you buddy!
Guest chapter 2 . 1/25/2013
Now that's what I'm talking about!
Guest chapter 1 . 1/25/2013
Dude, keep writing!
MimiTheAwesomeness chapter 3 . 12/28/2012
YEAH-EHEH! Lots of dialog!
"I would never put you through all that training if you couldn't win," -Dad
I like that line.
Hamon sounds mean, "I'm going to kill you, midget." -Hamon
See my point?
Mimi OUT! :3
AoideMythos chapter 3 . 12/25/2012
Hey, good going, bro! You should keep writing, I want to know if Shawn beats Hamon! XD
Qouc Minh chapter 2 . 11/15/2012
please review
anhanh chapter 2 . 11/1/2012
Wow... Um... A lot of Violence, eh?
I didn't now you, my little brother, would write about this...
Actually I do expect it. :l
Can you explain what the characters looks like? They look like blobs to me right now :I
MimiTheAwesomeness chapter 2 . 11/1/2012
Eww! The sword is covered with blood! He better wash that sword of his or else he'll give infection to anything else he cuts.
Mimi X3
AoideMythos chapter 2 . 11/1/2012
Dude, write more please! "Hi-yah!"-Me, pretending to use a sword. XD
I can't wait to read another chapter!
MimiTheAwesomeness chapter 1 . 10/31/2012
What's the surprise? A sword, dragon, Pony? It's probably a Pony, but if not, then a sword.
mimi X3
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