|Reviews for Chronicles of Aklas Book1- A Cry For Freedom (Beta)|
| Psykofreac chapter 3 . 4/27/2013
Hi sorry it took a while to review. I'm still only at the beginning but your story is decent so far. I like how you have three main characters who have their own plot threads that might intertwine later. But my only issue is having three starting chapters in a row to begin a new plot thread. Each beginning had quite a bit of exposition as it is but in this case there ends up being too much. Other than that though, it's a great start and I'll try to catch up :)
| Tanosparreboom chapter 1 . 3/25/2013
Although you used a wide range of different vocabulary you made a bit too many spelling mistakes. For example, in one of your last sentences:
'All the students starred back at him with fiery eyes' you mispelled stared. The names could be slightly more original, and the races are pretty common, but the overall plot is a good one.
| Deneru Yamada chapter 14 . 3/24/2013
| Deneru Yamada chapter 13 . 1/4/2013
more! I wanna read more! :D
| Deneru Yamada chapter 11 . 12/20/2012
whew! Nice chapter! Detailed actions. Great job! :D
| Deneru Yamada chapter 10 . 12/15/2012
I'm intrigued. You should update more Hunter. It's getting really interesting. :)
| Deneru Yamada chapter 9 . 12/9/2012
Wow! You're so cool.
You have a lot of characters and you could describe them thoroughly.
Amazing novel. :)
| Deneru Yamada chapter 8 . 12/9/2012
waaah! Xerxes and Xaklys met!
I'm slightly hoping they'd be good friends...hahaha! :)
| Deneru Yamada chapter 7 . 12/7/2012
Brilliant plot indeed.
Your story is amazing. :)
Can't wait to know what happens next.
| Deneru Yamada chapter 3 . 12/7/2012
Your story is really interesting...very detailed and all...
I'm hooked-up with it now. :)
| drewdawg123 chapter 7 . 12/1/2012
Nice work on it. Few errors but overall very good. But I'm still trying to figure out if each chronicle is a chapter or what but that isn't important. I still can't believe Andrew lost, not cool man. Keep writing I'm interested to see what your going to write next