Reviews for The God Slave (Prev: To Walk in the Wind)
FiggThe3rd chapter 4 . 11/17/2012
I can't wait for them to meet now :)
Please write and update soon!
Lovecupid chapter 4 . 11/16/2012
This chapter was good. I can't wait for Daja to be kidnapped and see how he will react. Update soon :-)
Highway Unicorn chapter 3 . 11/15/2012
[endless further examples of the Minister's taste for tactless extravagance.] The Minister is such a pimp. Just omg. I want to live his life and just tap some ass allday, everyday. :D

[Simply the sound of the twin fountains—glimmering white marble structures spouting crisp, crystalline fresh water—that adorned either side of the path] ah, that's such a nice home decoration. LIKE OMG. I wish i had that in front of my house-[The waste of it all. The upkeep and precious resources it took to feed such an arrogant display]- errrr, i mean, that's a total waste of water and...stuff...yeah...

[Go in, trample sacred ground, steal a religious artifact, desecrate a saint's tomb, immolate a holy church in a blaze of false glory? Yes.] hahahaha, this was funny. I liked how you set it up. :D

["Incestuous twin deities] ZOMG. ZOOOOOOOOMMMMMMG. IS THIS...IS THIS A CONNECTION TO US AND OUR LOVE? :DDDDD If it is, OOOOOOOHHHHH TOOTH, I wasn't even expecting this! :'D This was such a wonderful surprise to come across. *rolls around on the floor in glee*

[dragging his sister's body with him the whole way] HA. This made me laugh, and I think it's just because how Ozzie (CAN I CALL HIM OZZIE? :D) tells it. He's a very nice comic relief character. :3

I really liked this chapter, more than I liked the other chapters. I felt you put even more of your heart into it, which is like a lot, since you already pour a shitton of awesomness into your work. :D I dunno. I just really liked it.

Good job! :D
FiggThe3rd chapter 3 . 11/12/2012
I'm really enjoying this story :)
Please write and update this soon, as well as your other stories!
Lovecupid chapter 2 . 11/9/2012
This is interesting. I can't wait to read more.
Highway Unicorn chapter 2 . 11/8/2012

[He knew his fate was to meet Vhaki. To leave this world on his knees in the sands of Jabbha's desert and fulfill his destiny in the realm of the gods at Vhaki's feet. ] Daja must of had a shitty childhood :( Instead of being a kid, he had to prep to be a god's bitch. SIGH. This is the plot device and therefore I must bare his reduced childhood. XP

Oh, why would they shave his head? Is that some sort of prayer or something? :I IS THAT THE ONLY THING THE WOULD SHAVE *perverted giggle fest*

[but in the sheets of a master's bedroom.] der, fap fap fap XP BUT OMG! There's this awesome novel (or 4/5 book series) called "Kushiel's Dart." And it's based/setted in a smilar time frame/world, and it's about a girl who is raised in the art of pleasure, since that's the society's way of praying to the God Kushiel. AND YOU SHOULD READ IT. :D But it's a girls x male (sometimes a female) mostly through it, but there are side characters that are malexmale, sooooo yeah. :D

[Only Asseo's quick hand caught him,] ASSEO! :DDDDDDD

[Younger than Daja, he knew. Sixteen or seventeen] holy shit, and he's teaching Daja how to make good whoopie? :D ASSEO IS SO AWESOME. :DDDDDD

["I wanted to know if you would like to join me in one last lesson."] YUUUUUUUUUUUSSSSSS XD


I love Asseo.

So fucking much.


Anyways, this chapter was very well written, Tooth! :D I really liked the world you've created and their belief system; it instantly pulls me in. I also really really really like your imagery; tis so pretty and just amazingly created.

lunalover009 chapter 2 . 11/5/2012
Poor Daja... i pity him, being raised to die.
Nia Moone chapter 2 . 11/5/2012
Keep writing, this story is really intriguing, I want to know what happens!
FiggThe3rd chapter 2 . 11/5/2012
Really like this story so far! I can't wait for them to meet :)
Please write and update soon!
Luke Syvanen chapter 1 . 11/2/2012
Good Luck. I'm in the contest as well. This is an amazing piece. Keep it up; you're ahead of me by around 2,000 words. I'll follow you in NaNoWriMo. Keep up this quality and you'll do amazing.
chibikodo chapter 1 . 11/2/2012
haha Interesting. And did this greedy man consider what might happen to the source of water that feeds the province if he truly steals from and angers a god?

I can't wait to read what happens next. I love NaNoWriMo. :D
samy chapter 1 . 11/1/2012
A good start. I predict a very good story. You jumped right into the story and gave a lot of background information painlessly and in mostly dialogue. Dialogue, of course, is one of your strong suites.

I like the parallel sentences beginning with "Is it true that you …"

Good concept and good implementation so far. I'll be eagerly waiting for the next installment.
Highway Unicorn chapter 1 . 11/1/2012

[thirty-eight years of life] Dude is old. BUT I LOVE OLDER GUYS, if you never knew that. Like, something about guys in their mid thirties/forties makes Toot a very happy girl.

Where's Asseo?

["Come," the Minister pressed, "I insist."] I envision the Minister to be this really plump old guy, who slumps over the chair with slaves fanning him and feeding him grapes, kind of like the roman god of wine (WHOSE NAME HAS SLIPPED MY MIND FOR THE MOMENT) in futurerama, or in the Greek/Roman myths. XP

Where's Asseo?

['Vhaki's Gift'] You know what? Balasar should just hand over his ass to Vhaki. That would be the perfect gift. A nice round 38 year old bottom to rub the cold nights away. :D

Where's Asseo?

["A sacrifice."] IT'S DAJA, ISN'T IT! DDDDDDDDDD:

Where's Asseo?

[could possibly come of use to a servant of a god] heheheheheheheheheh like sex? XDDDDD Oh lordy, just imagine how the teacher started the lesson. "Well, today students, we're going to learn how to blow a -" :D

Where's Asseo?

THIS IS SUCH A GOOD START! :DDDDD You really got me pumped for this story, i just don't know, i'm really excited for it! :D And you write so beautifully, and i must praise you because you wrote all this beauty in a limited amount of time! :D

JUBE chapter 1 . 11/1/2012
When will people learn that pissing off gods doesn't usually end well... Oh well. Looking forward to more updates!
Nebulad chapter 1 . 11/1/2012
Sounds soooo promising. I honestly can't wait for another bit of this -
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