|Reviews for The Beautiful Game|
| DevourtheStars chapter 12 . 6/6/2013
Cami and Jared just make me so riled up sometimes. I just get so angry at Cami for being not as angry as I think she should be and I get that she's stuck in a hard spot, but I feel that personally if Emma and Jared did what they did to Cami to me I would not get over it that quickly. I probably wouldn't even bother picking up his calls.
Jared just pisses me off for getting with Emma and then a year later tries to get fresh with Cami. It's still vague as to whether or not Emma and Jared are still together officially or not.
The ending of this chapter is cute but I really just want Jared to get punished for being a stupid jerk face.
I'm way too emotionally invested in this story. I basically just sat for a good ten minutes thinking about how I would have reacted if I was Cami.
It's a great story and I hope for more updates soon!
-devour the stars
| mylittleprincess chapter 12 . 5/31/2013
next chapter please:)
| wyant14 chapter 12 . 5/31/2013
Awesome sauce! I really liked it and I can't wait for the next chapter! Also of course she likes Jared! So cute!
| TheEpitomeOfInsanity chapter 12 . 5/31/2013
I've been waiting for weeks for this chapter! I seriously couldn't bring myself to read another story because I got too attached with yours. oh and the last part of this chapter is just too thrilling. i couldn't help but smile.. :)
| CupsofTea chapter 12 . 5/31/2013
Fantastic chapter! The only thing is that I've noticed you use quite instead of quiet a couple of times through the story, and I thought you would like to know some things that'll just fix the grammar and spelling and stuff if you end up editing it. Again, loved the chapter! Keeping up the amazing work xx C.T
| DuchessYappingDog chapter 12 . 5/30/2013
Yes I do prefer update to reply, hahaha.
Oiiiii this all feels like the calm before the storm. I'm glad that Camila has admitted to herself, finally, that she still ike Jared. But sigh. Jared better not mess up again, but he has only one more chance. I hope she doesn't end up giving him a bunch of chances and make him feel like he can just take advantage of her again. That little bozo. AIN'T NOBODY GOT TIME TO WAIT FOR MEDINA TO COME AROUND. And to stop being a butthead. He needs to listen to some Eminem and realize he has only one chance! If he messes up and messes around with Emma again, that's it. Hahahaha. :D
| AMessofPickles chapter 11 . 5/26/2013
I didn't feel like it was a filler chapter at all! Like you said I think it just shows how nervous about the whole thing with Jared. She's really come to the realization that she's going to be with him a LOT. And plus I thought you developed their relationship pretty well here :)
Anyways, I really enjoyed this chapter. I thought it was fantastic and as a reader I felt as torn as Cami felt. I mean on one hand really want to hate because of what he did to her and how he treated her and on the other hand I really do think he IS a sweet guy and he really cares about her.
Behind me I heard a soft chuckle. "Well, I wouldn't call myself one but thanks for the compliment."
Oh Jesus. SEE? This is why I love him! *sigh* Why can't I have my own Jared Medina all to myself?
I glanced back at Chris and he looked much more amused than I did as we rushed down the lobby of the hotel to a back door.
Ahahaha Chris definitely knows what's going on :P
"Let me see," Jared said, leaning over me to peer out of my window. I was going to tell him to look out his own window. I mean, the view was the same but the words died short in my mouth when he leaned over and was so close to me.
"Where are we going?" I asked, my words running together.
I had thought that asking him a question would make him realize how much he was pushing himself into my personal space and that he would lean away. But no. He turned to me, so close that I if I leaned forward even a little our noses would touch.
...I may have squealed here...
My mind was reeling because Jared was watching me with a smile that I hadn't seen in a long time. I felt his knee press against mine and I couldn't help but feel like it was an unspoken challenge. If I pulled away, he would know he was making me nervous. If I didn't pull away, he knew I was enjoying it. Not that I was. Enjoying it, I mean. Well, only a little.
And that little bit that was enjoying it was pissing the rest of me off
I really liked that you included this bit because it really shows that Camila is so not a pushover which is great.
With a mischievous look he leaned in to my ear. I could feel his breath fanning against the point where my jaw and neck met. "Please?"
Do you still like him?
Good God, I thought, I'm so killing Alma next time I see her.
Ahaha it's like he knows just what to do to get her to concede :P Part of me can't wait to see what he does for her birthday and another part is dreading it because of what happened last time...Dear god I hope Emma isn't there.
Anyways awesome update as usual! Can't wait for the next chapter :D
| PsychoticParadigm chapter 11 . 5/23/2013
Can I just say that I freakin love this story?! I really cannot wait for the next chapter! It sucks that I'd have to wait but on the bright side, there's something to look forward to. TBH, I'm finding it hard to read another story because I've grown overly attached to this one. :))
| wyant14 chapter 11 . 5/21/2013
awesomeness! I really enjoyed this and I can't wait to see what comes next!
| renegade01 chapter 11 . 5/21/2013
i'm a little sceptical about this so called date...
chris and mark are both like wink wink nudge nudge haha... ;)
| mylittleprincess chapter 11 . 5/20/2013
neal seems like a good guy; i chose him.
| DuchessYappingDog chapter 11 . 5/20/2013
He better not eff up this time. And he better not be associating with Emma anymore. Or even invite that witch to their outing on her birthday. Grrrr we all know he's going to be stupid and mess up though. Poor Camila. How much more does he have to put her through before he can learn to be faithful?
| Pseudonym59 chapter 11 . 5/19/2013
I'm glad you included this chapter. Even though it's a filler, it shed some more light on Camila's character.
| AMessofPickles chapter 10 . 5/14/2013
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Goodness, I felt like such a girl, compared to Emma's beautiful full grown woman body and personality. Jared assured me over and over that they were only friends. Just friends. And I tried to believe it. I pushed aside all my doubts and worries and stood by him.
Ahhh come here Cami! You is kind. You is smart. You is important. And you don't need no man to complete you! (Even though let's face it, Jared is significantly drool-worthy). In all seriousness, this line just tore me to bits because I feel like every person has compared themselves and has felt insignificant because of someone else.
"Hopefully she doesn't get too hurt. I mean, she really should have thought a little more clearly. Why would Jared be with her?"
Uuuugghhh. To quote Sierra DeMulder who perfectly captures my frustrated emotions right now, "Just because I'm a feminist doesn't mean I will not *cut a b!tch*" Needless to say I hate Emma. She seems petty and just manipulative and ARGH.
NOT TO MENTION JARED JUST SAT THERE SIPPING HIS STUPID WATER AND I'M LIKE DUUUUUDDE WATER YOU DOING?
"That bitch!" Alma suddenly exclaimed, stabbing her untouched pancakes with her fork.
Yes. I agree. You know what? Alma should go with Cami just in case she needs to slap a certain someone. Knowing Alma she'd be all like, " No you didn't! Guuurrrl, hold my earrings!" And then Emma and Alma would duke it out in this enormous cat fight.
"Alma, babe," Victor said, trying to keep her from her raising her voice anymore. "Chill."
Ahaha I love Victor and Alma. They're amazing and completely wonderful :D Hehe I loved the way he moved the forks and knives as well.
"But that is my answer," I argued. "He's my best friend who I haven't really seen for a year up until recently." At her dry look I rolled my eyes. "In other words, I'm not sure anymore."
She blinked at me again and I felt my face slowly morphing into one showcasing my nerves. "You still like him," she said with authority.
Ahaha! I feel like this is exactly how my friends and I are together :P Cami is totally in denial. :P
While she was holding me close, she whispered in my ear, "It's okay if you still like Jared. Gotta admit he's good looking."
Once again I completely agree with Alma. Why can't there be more guys around my town like Jared? Or Victor for that matter :P
Annnd because I forgot to answer the questions in the last chapter I'll answer the questions now.
Thoughts? I love it as usual! I'm ten times more excited to see what's in store for Camile now that we know the truth and realizing how big of a deal it is that she'll be spending so much time around Jared. I'm so excited to see what's going to happen and how she'll reflect on herself/her past on her birthday since it was a time of great heartbreak for her.
What do you think of Emma? I hate her. She better not be hanging around Jared during the Confederations Cup. Nope. Nuh-uh. But it would be kind of entertaining if Cami slapped her...although I seriously doubt that she would. She seems to nice for her own good at times.
What do you think of Jared now? Ugh. I don't know! I have conflicting emotions! On one foot it's completely obvious that he cares so much about her! I'd even go so far as to say that he loves her (definitely as a friend, but maybe something more as well?) But on the other foot I hate him as much as I loathe Emma. WHAT WAS HE THINKING? He cheated on her. Technically. Which is just not okay. But at the same time I feel like there's still more to his side of the story...? Maybe? I dunno. For now I'll be watching him carefully.
And ideas for the summary? Hmmm not really sure I'm pretty terrible at them myself. But I remember way back when you said you wanted to change the title. I started thinking about "Football Fiascos" or "Soccer player Setbacks" or something. Idk mostly I'm just thinking out loud.
Anyways fantastic chapter overall! I'm super excited about the next update. Oh and sorry for the randomness and spaziness of my last two reviews. Yo no toma las drogas. ;)
| AMessofPickles chapter 9 . 5/14/2013
OKAY YEAH I KNOW I'M LIKE FIVE THOUSAND DAYS LATE FOR A REVIEW. Ugh, I don't know why but lately I'll just read a chapter from my alerts and just keep it on a tab and then CONTINUE WITH MY DAY. Gosh I've been so terrible with reviewing lately.
Anyways. On to the chapter review XD.
Wow okay where to start?! There was so much information and history about Jared and Camile's relationship that you had me wincing and grinning with each line and truth that was revealed.
So first of all I was really proud of Camile for telling Alma and Victor the truth. I thought that was a courageous thing for her to do and I really liked that about her. It just further emphasized how awesome and loyal she is to her friends and family which I liked a lot.
Secondly I love love love how you always incorporate the media and the press into the chapters. It's both realistic and just adds more tension to Jared and Camile's relationship. I'm half hoping that when she goes to the soccer place (jeez I cannot think of the name at the moment) she and Jared will have to hide from the press by hiding in an itty bitty closet where they'll be so overcome by the presence of the other person that a hot makeout session will naturally occur. Can that happen pretty please? ;P
To him, playing for Mexico had always been a dream because that's who he had grown up supporting and cheering on with his family.
I love how family oriented they both are! It's a nice change from other stories where they ignore the fact that the characters actually have a family.
With that one second, unspoken conversation I knew there would always be people interfering.
Aww. What's so heartbreaking about their situation is the fact that it's Medina's *dream*. Despite all of the pains that come along with it (aka no privacy), Camile just has to accept it since she knows how important it is to him. (Which is why we must have that closet scene. Like now.)
But having been best friends since we were born, I never expected him to do what he did next. What I also didn't expect was how willing I was to let him cup my face with both hands as if I were a fragile piece of porcelain and then close the inches between us in a slow, warm, and smooth kiss.
I was just grinning like a complete idiot here XD. They're both so adorable and GAH. I can't even handle them. They're too cute.
Only criticism I have for the chapter: Maybe put page breaks to separate the flashbacks from the present. It wasn't super confusing or anything, but I think it would help make it flow a bit better next time :) Overall, it was a fantastic chapter. I thought you described everything beautifully from Camile's feelings to Jared's own conflicting emotions.
Now on to the next chapter!