Wow, exciting! I like the action here and now I know who everyone is but BerefHex. I wonder who they are.

I think Rezzi's line at the end is pretty ominous. I wonder if it tiesin with the game.

Hmmm...the Grand High Messiah is...Tarvos? I dunno they look alike.

Hey Chica! I love this story! And Tarvos... *wink* Hehehehehehehehe! Keep up the great work!

Hmmm...the Grand High Messiah is...Tarvos. Gotta be. No really, they have to be the same person. Tarvos' flashback int he prologue makes me think that.

BerefHex and NexusJuncture are really interesting. I want to know more about them. Maybe they are demons like Tarvos is. Dante still continues to make me laugh. He and Tarvos have a very funny interaction and Rezzi really is interesting to me for some reason.

This chapter was deep and symbolic. If it's true that the game is a representation of their real lives then that means that Mae and Ayumi will die by the Grand High Messiah's hand, right? I hope not, because I want to know more about their characters. Also, the Grand High Messiah kind of looks like Tarvos but he's not even playing the game. I'm confused about that.

i think i know who the grand high messiah is...

maybe?

it's oz or tarvos. probably oz since he is in the game. or we haven't seen him yet. this chapter was really exciting. i also like how rezzi is a prophet. it fits her. i wonder where dante was tho. you never said much about him in the actual session.

This chapter is really interesting... In the sense that I have so many questions yet none are answered.

I like your characters. An amnesiac demon and a blind girl... I wonder how the story goes from here.

An error I noticed:

"I put a spall on myself so that my extra appendages become invisible." Is spall supposed to be spell?

But anyway, this is a great and well-written chapter. xD

It's nice to see you return to fiction press again Melissa, I like reading your stories for the manga story so I'm happy to see this posted up. What really drew me to this story was your summary, it made feel curious and wanted to read what was this story was about. What also drew me into your prologue was your details, I always loved reading them so I could get a clear image in my head about what's going on before ithe next chapter. I really look forward to reading more because your characters are unique and they make me wonder about what they're going to do next.

Can't wait to read more!

xRayne Aleu Wolfx

Good update. You know, I kind of think maybe Rezzi knows about Tarvos. I really do.

Dante's interactions with Tarvos are priceless. I sort of feel sorry for him, but at the same time, I wonder why he can see him. The more I read, the more it looks like Tarvos and Rezzi have this secret plan hidden from everyone else. I wonder if this was supposed to be something that happened, as in the two of them meeting. Their meeting was obscure in the first chapter so now i wonder.

I really like this so far. I want to know who BerefHex and NexusJuncture are. I think I know the rest.

This is a really well-written pilot chapter. I love the flow of the narration and the simple yet vivid descriptions.

I'll read the next few chapters later to see what the story is all about, as the prologue didn't hint much about the plot.

Anyway, good job in this chapter. xD

The more I read this, the more I love Dante. He's my kind of character. Tarvos seems to be getting darker each chapter, too.