Reviews for Deteriorated
pizzapig chapter 1 . 2/15/2013
Wow, that was an excellent short story, sad, exciting and thrilling, also on a unrelated note your bio is epic, hope you suceed at your dream to become a author
AlternatingCurrent chapter 1 . 12/17/2012
Did not see that ending coming at all! May I suggest that you fix a quick spelling error in "She felt the urge to fun,"? I had to stop and think about that for a moment, but the entire story was well written and well presented. Nice work!
katayoku.no.tori chapter 1 . 11/30/2012
awww! This was so sad! I love the mystery of the story, and the ending especially. I really liked how just finishing that definition summed up the whole entire story. This was amazing, the writing and the idea. Your descriptions were great and it was easy to imagine it all!
AladdinSane73 chapter 1 . 11/26/2012
Wow...that was great!
I was a bit surprised by the ending, but I liked it.
Farideh chapter 1 . 11/12/2012
that was so beautiful and shocking. I loved it.