|Reviews for The Zone: A Guide|
| RockSoap chapter 2 . 11/25/2012
This is pretty interesting. Your style is very fluent, and the tone changes from one chapter to the other, which is good because its a new character. It's very realistic- nothing anyone does seems out of place, and you've put a lot of time into developing these characters, which are pretty like-able. There are almost no errors from what I can tell and overall, it's really good.
My only gripe is that I'm not exactly sure what you're going for here in terms of a theme or plot. The summary is extremely vague at best, and these chapters don't really solidify it for me either. My first thought, from the summary alone, was that this was a story about a dude getting friend-zoned by the girl he likes, and his trials to overcome that obstacle. But after reading what you have, I'm honestly not sure. Is it a story about bullying? Is it a story about overcoming peer pressure and adversity?
Other then that, very well done. I'll be keeping an eye on this. Update soon.