Your opening story is so nice. I like your descriptions. They cause me to imagine views, emotions, details, etc.

I like to read fictions which I can imagine pictures.

Many people may think that reading long descriptions is so boring, but I think descriptions are one of necessities for fiction writing.

I will wait for your next chapters. Please, continue writing it. :)

Boring? Pshaw! This was really well-written.
My attention was immediately caught by your warning of femslash. I love the whole "tv show" thing. That's truly brilliant. I watch all these shows, and I do wonder how the actors live behind the camera, so great job!
It's pretty clear she doesn't like Kendall, too. It's so cute when she meets Ev! Classic shy girl, right there.
By the way, is Ev blonde, or is it Monica?