Reviews for Jasmine |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Thanks for writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I enjoyed this story very much, though the little crime-drama at the end didn't seem to fit in with the rest of the story as well as it might have. Looking back, I could see the buildup towards the moment, but the end of that segment seemed slightly anticlimactic. The romance, however, was great. I would love to see this written out in greater detail in book form somewhere in the future. |
![]() ![]() ![]() WOW! I could fill this page up singing your praises, but let me just say this was an AMAZIIIING story! Brilliantly written, great plot line, but... I did notice some inconsistencies in spelling here and there. Nothing major, just a word or two such as their when it should have been there. But other then those, this is one of the best(and longest one shots) that I've had the pleasure of reading in a while. Cheers! xD |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh my God...I'm so glad I found this story again :D Love it love it love it Ri |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story! But you may want to consider putting the story in different chapters, so that the reader doesn't have to scroll down one massively long page to read it. It gets kind of annoying... |
![]() ![]() Pretty good for a one-shot. Thanks for bringing it to fictionpress :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() absolutely brilliant! I'm still kicking myself over having doubts when seeing that it was a "mere chapter" long. Thank you for writing this |
![]() ![]() ![]() This was a really good story. I really liked it. You probably just should have separated the chapters. That's usually how people post stories. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is wonderful!I love this story. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hi lol, i started readin expecting a one-shot story (tho the summary looked potentially long) and ended up reading everything XD It's quite a nice story, at one point it reminded me of Beauty and the beast, the beauty showing up on the beast's doorstep and a matronly housekeeper...never mind, i probably make no sense.. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Beautiful story. I have found some spelling mistakes but it was oh-so-sweet! It was also well written, you did a very good job. |
![]() ![]() ![]() ok its 4:30 am at the moment and im finally finished absolutely fantastic story, i really want to read the sequel but i feel that i need to go to sleep :D you should update your sequel btw |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw! That's so cute! :D :D :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I've got one three words for you. Awsome. Completly awsome. |
![]() ![]() ![]() LOVE IT! Every character was so real and had realistic elements to further the plot. |