|Reviews for Tom's Zombie Experience|
| freddyburn chapter 1 . 11/18/2012
Good begining. This story has potential. Have to echo harrisonmarks in his review- give people seperate "speech lines." It just looks cramped otherwise.
| harrisonmarks chapter 1 . 11/15/2012
Ok, well, have to say, this is a great first chapter... you have good balance between describing whats happening and leaving it up to the readers imagination.
Just one thing- when people are talking, give every bit of speech it's own line and put " around them.
If you want to read more zombie stories, I am writing one at the moment. My beta, freddyburn, is also writing the second story in a planned trilogy.
This is going onto my favs, and I am following it