|Reviews for Ghostvision|
| Ink Flows Into Power chapter 1 . 11/27/2012
An interesting start, I can't help wondering how it will all go wrong for them! I enjoyed the relaxed style of writing and I hope that you manage to keep it throughout. However, I would like to point out that the characters are really quite similar so far - there's no real indication of characterisation and how they differ from each other. I understand that this is just the first chapter, but I would have expected some level of individuality of the characters. Maybe try making the mother stern and the father less so? or vice versa? Anyway, an impressive start and I am sure I will be continuing to read this story!