Reviews for Grace
psychoticpsychic chapter 1 . 11/17/2012
well, i'm not a very sci-fi/time-travel kind of person but, good beginning... is just me or does Vivian talk a little too much like Dean?
AspiringWriterGirl chapter 1 . 11/17/2012
Cool. Try to work on the dialogue structure a bit.

Bad: "Hey, wait Anna!" He yelled. "Please, stop it." Anna replied.

Good: "Hey, wait Anna!" He yelled.
"Please, stop it." Anna replied.