Reviews for Voyagers
JaveHarron chapter 1 . 11/23/2012
Okay, you've started off with an interesting premise. However, a few issues keep this intro chapter from reaching its full potential. One is there's too much exposition, very few metaphors or descriptive writing, and some of the characters have hard to distinguish "speech patterns," making a few lines of dialogue confusion. Still, there was some fun jokes and interesting concepts ("Looks like the Navy's found another way to save money" being a favorite).