This was so sad but I loved it. Jared and Nagasha's love will live on. Yes, I'm a sap. Anyway, the ending to this was perfect.

Jared's ending was well done. His acceptance was well done- it made the story more poignant. I didn't get much of a sense of Nagasha, other than he was necessary to the plot. I feel you could have filled out his character a little more.
This was a good read :)

Suki

I like the way you have structured this story a lot. The countdown makes everything so bittersweet. It reminded me of a film (I can't remember the name of) where people were 'released' (ie. killed) once they reached 30.

Johney

Great job with this story. I especially liked the unique pattern for speech, it really solidified the futuristic feel.

Hi, hi! :D I loved this piece! Awfully suspenseful and tragic! D: Jared sure is strong, right? T.T And poor Nagasha, but I'm so glad he's not giving up after his lover's death! Hehe, loved the Alice reference at the end! (I'm a total AIW aficionada! !xD) You're a pretty good writer, so thanks for sharing this! :D