|Reviews for A Vague Meaning:Revised|
| Krystal Watters chapter 1 . 11/23/2012
"you are being selfish to yourself" I don't think it means what you think it means... that or I don't think it means what I think it means...? Long story short, choose a less confusing wording?
The dialogue also seems a little too formal to be a conversation between best friends. it may even bee too philosophical depending on how old they're supposed to be (for some reason I get the impression of middle-school?).
And the two paragraphs at the end seem a little second-thought. Try to weave some of the information into the dialogue section, like "My childhood best friend turned to me and said, '...' he knows exactly how to push my buttons..." or something like that. That way the reader doesn't get an overload of information at the end.