|Reviews for Alley|
| OffTopic1984 chapter 1 . 11/24/2012
I wouldn't go down an alley after I saw something like that. Bleh! For an old drabble, this is really good. I am new to the horror genre myself, and would you mind taking a look at my story? I only have the prologue posted, but I promise things will get better with later installments.
| Krystal Watters chapter 1 . 11/24/2012
For stories this short, you need to cut out whatever is unnecessary. Make every sentence and every detail unbelievably compact. Second line can be even shorter: "Never again". "At that moment, his world was shaken." Is implied, so you don't need that line. There are a few other places as well
One thing I would like is why he was going down that alley in the first line. Was it a whim? A shortcut? A necessity?