|Reviews for The Bet|
| GroovyBenito chapter 7 . 12/13/2012
"He turned around and we did the dirty… again."
I couldn't handle it. I burst out laughing.
| renee chapter 1 . 12/10/2012
wow, grace. is this true? maybe we should meet and talk about this, you sound like a VERY interesting person!
| rereminor chapter 2 . 12/12/2012
nice going anne hathaway, toes... toes... toes... nastiness!
| GroovyBenito chapter 6 . 12/12/2012
Your story was ... interesting, to say the least. It definitely kept me intrigued. There were a few inconsistencies and scattered grammar mistakes, but your writing was pretty good overall. Your voice is conversational, making it easy to read and follow. I think you could go into more detail on some things, like outfits and appearances and feelings and stuff. For example, "I was tired and hungover" could be illustrated by saying "I felt like I was hit by a truck." Things like that. Show, don't tell. Maybe go into the party a little bit more, I felt like that part was a little rushed. Overall though, pretty good. Keep going! Dying to know how it ends.
I sound like a 40-year-old woman writing this.
| StirFryChick chapter 6 . 12/10/2012
POR QUE MY COUSIN
| Hippy-Princess-Razorart chapter 5 . 12/10/2012
I am interested to see where this well lead.
| StirFryChick chapter 4 . 12/8/2012
Ooo party. Update soon.
| StirFryChick chapter 3 . 12/7/2012
You will NOT do that to Michelle sometime! Cool chapter, I wana see why Michelle's all distracted
| StirFryChick chapter 2 . 12/7/2012
I like the Ben encounter. Also no more gross violent Michelle!
| twilightwinter chapter 4 . 12/4/2012
Noice :) I like :)
| The Golden Orchid chapter 3 . 12/3/2012
this is great! keep going :)
| The Golden Orchid chapter 1 . 11/28/2012
that was interesting!
can't wait to read more, so keep writing!
check out mine? :)
| StirFryChick chapter 1 . 11/28/2012
cute. wil be interesting to see how it goes. (also Herr Shaw...)
Michelle seems like an abusive beeotch