Reviews for Hyperborea
Krystal Watters chapter 1 . 11/30/2012
The skip between the first and second paragraph is quite abrupt. And perhaps the first paragraph should be the summary instead?

"Only he was toiled each day to lift himself out of bed" - toiled really isn't the right word here IMO.

I feel like the ending is a bit abrupt as well. What happened when he felt the breeze?