Reviews for Untitled
xxxxxxx07 chapter 8 . 2/20/2013
Hey! Finally got a chance to read this story!

My favorite part of the story was the parts with Xavier but I don't really know why. I guess because Xavier is so awkward he makes thing funny?

My least favorite part was the ending :( WHY THE CLIFFHANGER!? WHYYYYYYYYY?!

My favorite quote was "But I've felt like that a lot of times now. It's the same feeling I get when I look at you. Is that normal?" OMG CUE FANGIRL SCREAMS! lol I have no idea who to ship. Grace and Robin or Ben and Grace? I like both the couples! Who do you like better?

I can't wait to read the next chapter! So much to information to piece together!
HeadOverHeelsInHate chapter 8 . 2/2/2013
Golly geeeee Sophieeee! Awesome chapter. I wanna know what Robin does next!
My favourite quote was when Robin and Grace were talking about free falling and he said ""But I've felt like that a lot of times now. It's the same feeling I get when I look at you. Is that normal?"". It was so cute. But I'm wondering how Grace felt about him falling for her. Like, it's cool that she realized that since Robin came in to her life, she had stopped feeling that way towards Ben, but would finding out Robin's feelings make her awkward and nervous around him, or self-concious, or smug, or something?
Anyways, I'm not to happy with Grace for having feelings for Ben. :P Nah. But at least she's slowly finding those feelings moving more towards Robin or something like that. And thankfully, despite his odd possesiveness (which I really don't get as to why he feels such), he has nothing more than platonic feelins towards her, or so it seems.
Cool chapter! Update soon!
Marjulie chapter 8 . 2/1/2013
Hi Sophie! Golly gee, this chapter was so good I have to review!

My Favourite Part was: Jumping into the ocean/ocean scene and 'retelling' of Ben and the girl in the club.

My Least Favourite Part was: again I have no "least favourite" part, but I'm really unhappy with the possible fact that all Ben feels for Grace is "possessive jealousy." You don't have to be in love with Grace, but what's there to be jealous and possessive for?

My Favourite Quote is: "Here come the fun police to take away my maths." - Xavier
"I find it hard to believe that anyone's slept with you." - Robin

General comments: I feel as if Ben has some violent issues; it showed especially in the ending scene. I hope he can straighten out his past and deal with his inner demons.

Update soon!
TO-OLazyToLogin chapter 8 . 2/1/2013
Grace & Robin! :)
I kinda don't like ben :/
Aurora Olivers chapter 8 . 1/30/2013
Wow, just amazing! You really outdid yourself with this beast of a chapter! I didn't want to stop reading and certainly didn't want th chapter to be over. I can't wait for the next one! I loved how you switched between what was happening and what had happened between Ben and Grace, it was a very interesting and unexpected insight. I just adore how Robin said that he feelt like that with Grace! I can't wait to see how this pans out. Hurry up with the next chapter, I honestly can't wait!
Vaudeville chapter 5 . 1/29/2013
Hi Sophie! Golly gee, this chapter was so good I have to review! And now, I'm just going to skip straight to general comments.

Man, I love this so much. It's always great to see such a fresh idea on Fictionpress and I commend you for coming up with what seems like a great one! I wish I could do it.

What really excited me about this story is that I'm kind of relating it to what I'm doing in school right now. I'm in neuroscience and I specialize in Autism, which is mainly characterized as a social disorder. I've recently been looking of research and theories that rather than a neurological and social disorder, it is actually a form of evolution in humans. And this evolution is mainly to do with lack of emotions and empathy, kind of like insentia. I've actually been jotting down notes and details because I've been thinking about writing some sort of fiction about it actually being a form of evolution, so reading this story has been really interesting so far.

Did that subject have anything to do with you writing this story?

Anyway, this is way too long but I just wanted to say that I'm really enjoying this. I love the subject and the characters are enthralling. Keep up the great work!
kristymarigold chapter 8 . 1/29/2013
My Favourite Part was: The flashbacks to Ben and Grace younger. And the sex scene. Got to love the sex scene. Reowr.

My Least Favourite Part was: Hearing that Grace has a crush on Ben. GO AWAY BEN. Ruining everything.

My Favourite Quote is:"I have work to do. Or, I'll just sit and cry. Whichever." Xavier's smile had turned tight. I freakiing LOOOVVEE Xavier, I think he's effing hilarious. Why does no one else seem to agree with me.

General comments: This was my favourite chapter by far. The relationships and the action and the new information... it's so exciting! And Ben! He's starting to make much more sense now. I love how all of the characters have their own distinct FEEL to them. You capture that really well.
kristymarigold chapter 7 . 1/29/2013
My Favourite Part was: That part at the end where he's holding her. It's adorable! I want my own Robin!

My Least Favourite Part was: Right at the end. I don't like Frances, she scares me :(

My Favourite Quote is: She just looked at him as he touched his head against hers in a rare display of affection. "I'm nothing if not subtle."


Update soon!
Starsis chapter 8 . 1/29/2013
This chapter was great! I really loved it, though I was a little confused at the end. Im sure that in the next chapter I will understand.
Anyway, update soon! :)
Ney13 chapter 8 . 1/29/2013
Fave part: Robin's POV
Least fave: Hearing that Robin has no feelings for Grace [at least, that's what it seemed like. You said 'he', and I wasn't exactly sure if you meant Robin or Ben. I was rather hoping that he would fall in love with her:(]
Fave quote: Don't have one
Comments: Still a bit confusing, especially when you have two guys the main character is talking about and she refers to one as 'he.'
You're an excellent writer, btw. I can't really describe it, as I usually try and offer some creative criticism, but it's just amazing. The idea is totally original and unique, and the names aren't completely out there, so it has a realistic feel to it. You do the emotional scenes extremely well, especially from the character's POV (IE, sad and horrified from Grace, uncaring and cold from Robin)
Ney13 chapter 3 . 1/29/2013
Oh dear Jesus (I've been using this phrase quite a lot for some reason, don't ask why because I don't even know)!
Again, with it being slightly confusing. What happened to the insentient? Did they kill him? And if so, why? Aren't there laws and whatnot saying you can't do that to a person?
Ney13 chapter 2 . 1/29/2013
Hm, sometimes it can get a little confusing. I had no idea what an insentient was, and I had to google it. I would have liked it better if you explained what it was rather than have to look it up myself (lol, I sound so lazy)
AxioteA chapter 8 . 1/29/2013
Hey! Long time no see, glad you are doing good. Just wanted to drop a quick word to tell you this chapter was amazing, albeit a bit explicit, and to keep up with the good work. I'd be really grateful for an as quick as you can update :D
Mt chapter 8 . 1/29/2013
I love long chapters! I also love how Robin's mind works, his thoughts, feelings. And the Ben/Grace/Robin thing is just getting more and more complicated, which I absolutely love! It's great how they don't just fall in love in the first chapters and then everything works out. (although I'm hoping that will happen in the end)

But then again, I really hope Grace figures it out and kisses Robin soon. As much as I love Ben, I think Grace would be better off with him as a friend and not love interest. Yes, they have awesome chemestry, but there's just something about Robin that... Well.. I truly want him to find happiness with Grace, because they're such a good match, and they deserve each other. I hope she contineus learning him about life like she is now, and that she, at the same time, learns, herself.

Please, please don't kill one of them off trying to fight the people responsible, I'm not sure I could bare it. Enough innocents have died because of them. (well, strickly speaking Robin's not complely innocent..) I love how you're revealing bits of information along the way, so the readers learn as Robin and Grace do. That makes everything more exciting! So thank's! And if you manage, please update soon! Honest to truth, I check for updates every day xD (now I feel like a stalker)
Cazie chapter 7 . 1/6/2013
It was great! :D I sort of like the idea of how he can just switch off his emotions when he feels like it. Its sort of cool, in a creepy way! :)
Please update soon, I can't wait for the next chapter! :D
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