Reviews for Rearden: A Secret in the Desert: June 2011
Dreamers-Requiem chapter 1 . 7/22/2013
As always you have a lovely writing style, and a great way of drawing the reader into the world and landscape of these characters. That said, I think you could cut down (just a little) on some of the description in favour of showing the emotions of the characters. It’s the one thing I think is missing; it’s hard to get a handle on what either of them are really thinking or feeling. I’d also suggest in places slowing down the pace a little, so as a reader we can focus on the characters a bit more.