Ooh, two chapters to read. Maybe it pays to get behind in my reading after all :P I’ll review chapters two and three simultaneously if you don’t mind, what comments I have can be said about both.

I love how a One Direction concert equals a zombie apocalypse, that totally made me lol! Are you a fan? I kind of get the feeling that you're not... please excuse me if I'm wrong ;)

I have to be honest with you, these chapters didn't leave me feeling as satisfied as the first chapter did. I think the problem is that you have a very succinct writing style that is great for pace and worked well in your introduction but it doesn't do a fully fleshed chapter as much justice. There is a lot of telling in these chapters and not much showing (if any), everything happens so quickly that I kind of felt like I was skim reading - I got the gist of what was going on but I wasn't really experiencing it and that meant I wasn’t able to invest myself in the characters or the situations they found themselves in. I feel like these chapters could use – for lack of a better word - some ‘padding out’. More detail, more character interaction, have the action happening in more of a ‘real time’ scenario; right now it all seems a bit too “this happened, then this happened, now this is happening, then this happened right after”. Statements are fine but they make points, not tell stories.

The chapters are rather short but I think you end them at their natural point with a good hook that has readers wanting to click on. I really liked this extract:
“He recognized Anna in an instant, imagining her purple eyes and her small smile and her night of firsts.”
- Although I think ‘remembering’ is a more suitable word than ‘imagining’ but that’s just mho.

I don’t want to seem like I’m tearing your work apart, because that’s not my intention – I just want to be honest and help if I can. Writing is very much a trial and error process that gets easier the more you do it (Lord knows I’m an expert when it comes to the error part, lol!) I think you have the beginnings of something really good here, all it needs is buffing up.

Keep it up!

not bad. Is that it though

Good scene here. Keep it up

I agree with Zellatron about being a constant reader about this being a good opening.

I really enjoyed this opening. It's not massively "hooky" but its a nice, subtle introduction with an undertone of foreshadowing that sets it up well in my opinion. I like the characters, it'll be interesting to see how they cope with a zombie apocalypse and what will be in store for them. Count me as a regular reader, I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this :)