Reviews for Betrayal
myonyxnight chapter 1 . 12/12/2012
this is a breath taking poem.
PoisonedElysium chapter 1 . 12/11/2012
Chilling. I like the irregular rhyme scheme and rhythm, it gives this a staggered feeling that really emphasizes the pain of betrayal. I love the use of rhetorical devise - gives that line a real cynnical feeling. Overall, this is a lovely piece.
skersey chapter 1 . 12/11/2012
like the alliteration lots. "bleeds out blindly" "red, ragged wounds." the piece has pulse, really well done. keep writing!
Rosey Mulvey chapter 1 . 12/11/2012
I enjoy the theme of this poem and can identify with the message. The only thing I'd work on would be the grammar, but that is poetic license. Good work!