|Reviews for Liam: A Rose With Bitter Petals: Christmastime 2029|
| Dreamers-Requiem chapter 1 . 3/3/2013
Some of this is a bit jumpy. I may have said this before, but the pacing can be a bit too quick at times; I feel like the last paragraph moves just a tad too fast. Slow it down, add in some about the character's emotions. Some of what happens here feels like it comes out of the blue; ["Why don't you ask Anya, since you love her more?"] for example. A little bit more build up, some hinting of why she feels that way would really draw the reader in more. Maybe a touching scene between Liam and Anya. And be careful when you have a lot of characters; again, slowing down the pace a bit to just reveal them a bit more to the reader would really help getting the characters fixed in their heads. As always, hope this helps.
| bloodpressures chapter 1 . 12/14/2012
Aw, that was beautiful. The narration is flawless. I adore all of the character's names, and to be honest, the main character is so likeable. I plan to read all of your previous posts to get caught up on your series, as I'm very curious about it. Thanks for posting.