Reviews for Unfiished
jenxrawr chapter 1 . 3/6/2013
in the first stanza you write: [It's falling to pieces...Stuck on top an earth] Iḿ a little confused, an sounds a little weird in this context. Maybe: stuck on top of the earth, or stuck on top of Earth.

Maybe play around with using grammar, I love using it in my poetry to enhance what Iḿ trying to say or help the eye focus on a word or phrase.

Second stanza, first line... I think you mean: I am standing...

The fourth stanza is beautiful. My favorite part of the poem, I really cant even express how just ravishing that is and it really sets itself up for the ending.
Love A Mysterious Thing chapter 1 . 12/15/2012
True poetry. Absolutely beautiful. I loved the lines "Did you ever see yourself walking along side each prayer?/Or the story of the last fallen star/Did you really let the wishes drop?" The imagery in this was thought provoking and made my heart race. I loved it. Great write.