Reviews for Psychronicles
Darth Zannacross chapter 2 . 7/2/2014
I still am a bit confused on what is going on, it seems Ian seems like the main lead though. Also, Vampires eh? Not sure how they are related to the exploding illness but guess we will find out. This story gives me a Phantasy Star or Star Ocean vibe with the powers and the world, should lead to more fun stuff.
Darth Zannacross chapter 1 . 7/2/2014
This story sounds ambitious to say the least, but I am a bit confused, it feels like the chapter started a chapter ahead or something. Well, a illness that causes you to explode is a rather extreme thing, wonder if its natural or man made? Well, the doctors seem like a good bunch for the rest I am not sure who is suppose to be the main lead, Stan, Ian? Guess we will see. Well, Gundam references are always fun, we will see how it goes but till next time.
Max Sorrell chapter 24 . 6/29/2014
lol I love that your characters gave the announcement. I love those four. XD
I'm looking forward to the rewrite bro! :D
Guest chapter 1 . 12/2/2013
Woah,when i saw this story i was about ready to give up on fictionpress. It seemed it was all badly written and/or too predictable, but i gave it one more chance. And i'm glad i did! This story is not only well written, but unique! I love the characters! Please write more soon.
DevilPogoStick chapter 3 . 9/29/2013
Hmm, I felt that the author note kind of leaves a bit of a sour note for me knowing you decided to rush it.

While I do respect your opinion on why you need to do so, I can't help but feel that it meant the pacing wasn't going to be that great.

Nevertheless, I thought it was still well written even with that fact in mind. Still a shame that Morris got taken out with ease and stuff. (then again, a first arc's a first arc)

Keep it up!
DevilPogoStick chapter 2 . 9/29/2013
Alright, back to the story.

I thought the fight was in a ways, simple, and that's a good thing. Having walls of text to explain a lot of things would have bogged down the story and its length.

The fight with Vermillo was kind of interesting and he did prove out to be a pretty neat opponent.

Keep it up!
Clear World chapter 3 . 9/29/2013
o.o oh wow. With such a strong showing in your first chapter with all that logic explaining why each reason could be the answer, I had so much built int expectations for these kids. I thought they were going to solve this case like Sherlock homes style.

Though, they were pretty good at locating the base of the terrorist, so I give thumbs up for that, but having Stan just reveal the actual culprit is very disappointing. I thought the kids were going to solve this case, showcase their talent and skill set, not some third party who just outright tells them. That part kind of detracted the who 'who did it' aspect of the arc since nothing leading up to gave any clues.

Eh, regardless, your writing has a good logical flow and I wish to see more of the whole reasoning of logic as those parts are what shined for me and made your piece special. The action is nice. It is done well where I can visualize it. The banter between the four kids are... passable. They're good but I hope in future chapters, they are fleshed out more. There is no way these colorful cast of kids can be one-note.
DevilPogoStick chapter 1 . 9/28/2013
Alright, got some time to check this out...Very sorry I did not get to this sooner. :(

Nevertheless, the story is very interesting and while it is long, I do find the things mentioned kind of exciting and I like to see how it keeps on going! :)

keep it up!
McMicah chapter 1 . 9/27/2013
Interesting first chapter. These kids are quite interesting, if not insane. I'll try to keep up.
M1zz chapter 1 . 9/27/2013
Hey Psy! I just want to let you know that I'll be reviewing the chapters as I read them so you get a better sense of how I feel during reading this story as well as points that I think might help. I also want to apologize in advanced because I may only be able to get to the second chapter, it's been a busy week. Okay, here we go!

VWVVW

I feel like there was a word missing in this sentence: "It appears analyzing each and every person of late teens and adult age."

Also the section is pretty interesting. It doesn't give us our main characters or st least not yet but still sets up a conflict in the story: "Why are people over 15 bursting in to flames?" Some of the narrative style seems off a little: "However, he was surprised to find the bottle empty, remembering how he had to refill before contemplating on the corpse" and "In fact, Doctor Nol will no longer even be able to make it out of the exit let alone drive his car home..."

I think those are weird because they don't sound very natural. I don't know if that was what you were going for but those those two just felt out of place.

VWVVW

The little speech the guy gave was kind of funny. They really are trying everything, even though some of them seem silly.

The entrance of the mysterious figures made me chuckle. I'm going to say that I don't like the mini-character profile description of the people but that's my real preference.

But yes, why kids? They seem a little too young but I also think it makes it interesting.

Again, some of the narration is still a tad awkward but whatever.

VWVVW

The end is by far my favorite part of this chapter. This is shaping up to be a very interesting story indeed.
cmaej chapter 2 . 9/26/2013
LOL I thought Ian would be the group's leader since he's the eldest; boy, I was wrong.

Prisha seems to be a good leader, although it seems that he has a stick in his butt at times. Then again, what anime leader doesn't?

Corey is so cute and moe, but he's a competent fighter and surprisingly logical... to an extent.

I'm not sure what to make of Rina, yet. The lone girl in the group needs a little more screen time before I make my verdict.

You actin scene was pretty good; it's not lopsided and it even had it's own anime-style quirk.
Lord Slayer chapter 1 . 9/24/2013
Neat premise, though it's still pretty rough. You need to show more and tell less. A bit more scenery would be good, too,
xxxyx chapter 4 . 9/24/2013
Oh, Prisha you showoff... Now I got reminded of my high school math skills, which are now extinct... ;w;
Uh... Corey's jibes are not as funny as I thought it should... but maybe that's just me.
Hurray for religion! *shot* Sorry, being Corey here.
Uh, fishcake? Random. Is that meant to be a joke? I almost thought that the case this time is some supernatural entity hypnotizing people into having violent cravings for fishcakes.
You have a try on philosophy there, with the balcony-talk, and it amuses me how often the Western approach to God is applied on manga-esque works. I've yet to see someone view God from a different perspective. But, meh, never mind. Just me rambling.
Overall, maintains the quality of the third chapter, just with less action (duh, it is an arc beginning anyway). *raises glass* Here's hoping for better chapters coming!
xxxyx chapter 3 . 9/24/2013
*just read on comp* Wah, nice cover.
Hm, I like the concept of Incendis manipulating spontaneous combustion, although the explanation was kind of... disappointing. It was something as straight-forward as the food.
The names are still kind of hard to trace, except for the main protags; I still often find myself wondering who is who. (I got the attention span of a goldfish? 0(tilde)0)
'"You were fortunate this Incendis group are by the small chance as dumb as you and not prepare any traps."' - true, I was expecting much more for an arc, and the battle, in my opinion, is slightly below average.
Lol that end.
But I see improvements. :D
xxxyx chapter 2 . 9/24/2013
, much better than last chapter.
2. Maintains the intelligent storytelling of last chapter. But not too outstanding though. It feels like a teenage detective novel.
3. Pace and action picking up, it's more exciting than last chapter, a more pleasant read.
4. I like Rina's quips, that makes her noticeable among other characters. Others are not so. Guess she's my fav for now.
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