oh my! Please, would you consider upgrading? Pleasee, pretty please!
*drops to knees*
*starts begging*
*sheds few tears*
*takes out a gun*
*points at you*
*"update Now!"*
Ok, I'm joking, but please consider!

Over a year is far too long for an update; I want to see how their date goes!

so what happened to this story? It was getting good.

Eeeeeeek, i love this story, i have a huge obsession with the mafia, so i'm always looking for a good mafia slash, and this ones super good! Please, update soon, i so wanna no how the date went! :D

This is really good, can't wait for more!

I love it this time but remember add some danger to it

I really like deangelo!

I can't wait for the next chapter I think it should be longer but other than that it's a great story!

What's Deangelo wearing? :)

Awesome chapter! I'm curious to see what movie Sam picked out.

I an't wait to read more, please update soon!

You have an interesting start, but your story could use some basic editing.

When a different character speaks, they get a new line.
Ie, you incorrectly wrote: "Yo, Sammy," Max answered, "what's up?" Sam rolled his eyes at the nickname, "I thought you'd want to know that I have a date tomorrow."

Correctly should be: "Yo, Sammy," Max answered, "what's up?"
Sam rolled his eyes at the nickname, "I thought you'd want to know that I have a date tomorrow."

You also have a problem with run on sentences and dialogue. If you read your story out loud, whenever you pause for breath you add a comma, but whenever you stop you add a period. It's actually a really natural reaction when reading aloud for native English speakers. Ie: "I thought you might appreciate that," Sam chuckled, "now tell me what you're really doing here."

Correctly should be: "I thought you might appreciate that," Sam chuckled. "Now tell me what you're really doing here."

Your story is also lacking in basic descriptions. I have no idea what any of your characters look like. Where is Sam's stand in the neighborhood. Does he live in a city? Are there trees or is there wind nearby? Does his stand smell like something nostalgic? Add some emotional descriptors to their voices: "Sam said with a scared waver in his voice."

Adding any of those would really help build your story. I think you have an excellent premise and very good characterizations. I am looking forward to your next chapter, and to their movie date, but I hope you take this constructive criticism to heart.

post the next chapter soon, say this month ?
leaving so much time in between posting chapters makes it difficult to get into the story.
But it is interesting so far .

I really like where this is going. As ive said before, mafia/averagejoe love stories are at the top of my list of favorites. And there is only about a handful of them out there. So please continue and update soon :)

I feel like Sam should be a bit more freaked out that Deangelo broke into his apartment.

Great chapter! PLease update soon!

Gregor is a tool. Sam should go angry big brother on him and go after the idiot with a shotgun.