Reviews for Empty
sapphireshadow15 chapter 1 . 1/21
Wow, I really, REALLY like this poem.

First off, the flow is rather nice. It always makes a poem more fun to read. Secondly, it isn't bland at all; you support it with brilliant imagery so that it tells a story rather than being just a clump of wording. Your vocabulary is broad and not dull, and I commend you for the lines 26-28. They hold something special in my eyes :)

Please continue to write
-Sapphire
Naver chapter 1 . 12/20/2012
I really enjoyed this poem. I really like the flow and the words you used through out it, it's fantastic! I understand the feeling.. Of wanted something like that... Maybe if we keep trying we'll find it. :)
Favorite lines:
"I even want to feel the fall

As a single error takes it all"

"The weight of years

As they drag and plod

The speed of my mind

Against the resisting stream of time"

I felt this one and really could relate, again great piece you wrote. :)
SunsetSprite chapter 1 . 12/20/2012
I feel your pain. Don't worry, all the empty that is lying in your heart will go. It took me a while to figure that one out, but it is true.
THIS IS SO EMOTIONAL! LOVE IT!