|Reviews for The Dreamers|
| Prolix chapter 1 . 1/4/2013
A very intense opening, really brought me into the story and formed an instant emotional attachment to the characters. I like that you used a mixture of dialogue and narration to explain their situations early on, but in a way that did not slow down the story.
On the same note, I felt slightly rushed. I would suggest expanding this chapter with some description. Give the readers a deeper look into the character's minds and how they perceive their lives. If you could do this in a space that does not encumber plot advancemnt, the chapter length (and more importantly, feel) would be much better.
Overall, well written and looking forward to reading what happens next.
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| Shadowdawn199 chapter 7 . 12/31/2012
Great story. I really like it. I think that there will be confusing stuff on the flashdrive.
| MyDesperateEndeavor chapter 1 . 12/26/2012
The obvious relation between the two starts of the character's story is so cool to read :D with the "red" and the 'not real not real not real' things. And the first sentence with the "red. everything is red" is such a great hook!
| T.B. Cross chapter 1 . 12/25/2012
I think this has a lot of potential, even if it is pretty short. :) I think your short, fragmented sentences describing Cecily's dream really added to the harshness of moment. I hope you will add more.