Reviews for Mr Darkness and Mrs Moonlight
Y. S. Wong chapter 3 . 3/18/2014
Oh, so this is where MDMM goes hard M, borderline MA. I was just about to say that your prose felt rather loose and casual this chapter; there are a few typos scattered throughout as well. But then in the second half you pull... that.

You were probably at your best when writing basically the second half of this chapter, actually. You slowed things down and went excruciatingly specific with the details and definitely achieved the desired effect. Definitely your best writing so far. I don't know what that says. (*w*)

But yep. Keep up the good work.
Y. S. Wong chapter 2 . 3/5/2014
Kind of a slow chapter. Picked up near the end though.

Even though hunting-invisible-demon-monsters-in-an-urban-setting is not particularly original, I'm really liking your storytelling. Despite the slow start, the pacing feels strong and Noboru feels unexpectedly likeable.

I thought the jumping back and forth of perspective from Noboru to Emi was a little bit more jarring than enlightening, though I got used to it by the end.

I also think your prose can be a bit stiff at times, particularly dialogue. Some of the things coming out of your characters' mouths just sound a little bit stiffer than natural.

Anyway, nitpicks aside, you get full marks for enjoyment factor, so in the end, that's all that really matters. Well done. (*w*)
cmaej chapter 4 . 2/19/2014
And I'm back!

I was disappointed that the lust curse was countered so easily. Then you mentioned that it wasn't fully expunged! I knew it was going that route, but you fooled me for a moment. \(*3*)/

I will add that the interaction between Noboru and Peaks was entertaining and realistic. It also gave me some insight to Noboru's character and his background. However, I can see where you might get caught in the Mary Sue trap for Peak (why does her name constantly reminds me of boobs?).

Chuunibyou... I had to look that word up. Well, I just learned something new.

LOL Noboru's final thought was a nice touch.
DappledKarma chapter 2 . 2/19/2014
It was kinda a slow chapter, for the most part. But you know, that isn't necessarily a bad thing. You took the time, effort and care to introduce quite a few characters, all with unique traits, personalities and looks, and you managed to make it not feel rushed and not too slow either. I felt like the progression was just right. Emi Peak. That alone is an awesome name. I'm enjoying her character a lot. She's smart and has the right amount of 'ojou-sama' traits. Looking forward most to seeing reading about her. Then of course, Noboru. He's very observant and confident in his abilities. I can't wait to know more about him. Also, I like the magic system, in particular the costs of using it;; having to have utter focus so that one does not lose their self in the pleasurable and painful feelings they experience.
cmaej chapter 3 . 2/17/2014
It's about time!

Arata X Norobu - My yaoi OTP!

Once again, my pervert side is kind of disappointed that it didn't go all the way. At least have Noboru help her release. *shot*

I know... I know... You have a plot and it will be out of his character. Nonetheless, great chapter. I hope you keep writing!
DappledKarma chapter 1 . 2/13/2014
Okay. That was an interesting start. Perfect way to end the chapter, and the way things were described... yeah, this is right on the boundary between M and MA. It was great. I like that it was shown in the villain's point of view.
cmaej chapter 2 . 2/13/2014
I think this is the first story I've read that has a smexy main character. I love smexy characters.

You introduced the new characters nice and fluently. Piiku-san (why do I think pikachu?) is the typical cliche character but you managed to give her some personality. I honestly feel bad for her, constantly wearing different faces and rarely being herself. She has a busy lifestyle and is not able to live the life of a normal teenager, but she doesn't bitch about. She take it all in stride, which is what I like most about her.
cmaej chapter 1 . 2/13/2014
"This is a good start," says both the perverted me and refined me.

LOL That first sentence in the second paragraph took me off guard. I was like, "Wait a minute! What the hell am I reading!? Nooooo. I'm not reading... shit... yes, I am."

"Ready or not, here I come!" Weird choice of words before a rape.

Is it bad that I'm sort of disappointed that the hero arrived just in a nick of time? *triple shot*
addadeleteaccountoptionidiots chapter 3 . 1/27/2014
The first thing that I have to say is that, wow, you bunch up these classical shounen settings really well without making it sound corny (hehe, the ero scenes were fantastic too *shot*). Normally I would turn down a story involving outright magic unless it was good. To me, there's nothing more spectacular a failure than mucking up in the magic-fantasy genre (I can't explain it-my gut just screams in agony). That was the problem I had with the new anime this winter, Mahou Sensou. If this was an anime... Oh, wait, then it would've become a hentai... O_O

Noboru is no pushover. That was made clear on the prologue. It's a fresh break from the troubled, stuttering and angst-ridden teens of the usual shows that are running nowadays (I had enough of that after Neon Genesis Evangelion, and Evangelion doesn't even count since it's, well...Evangelion! I LIKED Ikari Shinji at least!). Emi, too, doesn't seem like she'll be your usual damsel in distress, although I doubt she'll stay as one.

You stay true to your style, another thing I envy. There are no over-the-top characters to muck over the serious, no-nonsense style, and I like how Noboru's otaku lifestyle with the two other geeks of his class, who are completely normal, realistic characters, contrasts with his demon hunting. It's been a while since I've read a story without comedy slapped on every chapter. Emi's part of the story, while it may seem boring to some, was actually quite interesting to me as it made her more believable as a heroine and genuine character (who eventually gets almost-raped/dominated by a demon *corks spurting nosebleed*). To me, this gives off a vibe not unlike dark fantasy, which I only read in cautious amounts in fear of getting drunk on.

Overall, I can tell it's going to focus more on Noboru and Emi's relationship, although I guess future arcs might expand the setting and introduce a few more characters. Actually, that's just me and my love for world building working up, but reading this never fails to make me motivated for more fantasy/romance.

...Your last update was last year? *wheezes, trembles and crawls on the ground* I want moar...
YelloMage Iero chapter 3 . 8/26/2013
Ah. ;w; I have no idea how to review this chapter. Where do I begin? I just loved how you did everything with it: the pacing, the story, the character development... we had plenty of little humorous moments, plenty of more serious ones... the whole shebang, really. You brought in new characters very skillfully, and we finally got to know more about how the prologue went. ./. Certainly seemed to be a fun piece to write. /shot/
And I look forward to seeing more of your writing, Kro. I love the story, the characters, the style... nya, can't wait for the next chapter!
Y. S. Wong chapter 1 . 2/15/2013
That was good. Definitely pushing the boundaries of MA, but the pacing was excruciatingly controlled and deliberate, making Noboru's grand entrance even better.

And good to see Dourakusen used! Exactly the spell I was looking for an example of, lol.
bradpara chapter 2 . 1/18/2013
Nice so far, very exciting I hope to see you finish this.
Unweighted Book Author chapter 2 . 1/6/2013
Noboru's parts were my favourite, probably because that's when most of the action occurs. As far as main characters go in stories like this, he's probably one of the more solid and likable ones. He manages to be competent without straying into hyper-competent genius territory, and he already has character motivations.

Emi is still not directly involved with the main plot, which makes her sections less interesting to read since it feels like nothing in particular happens, but that's just how it goes when you have a set-up like this. I'm sure that she'll get involved very soon, so that's not a real problem.

Noboru's friends aren't particularly interesting but as side characters, they don't really need to be. It's worth mentioning that they aren't annoying and don't seem very crazy, which is something I approve of. They have a touch of realism which I feel works well in contrast with Noboru's supernatural other life.
Unweighted Book Author chapter 1 . 1/6/2013
Well, I won't go too deep in the ecchi stuff (which means that I can't actually comment much on this chapter, I guess). Suffice to say that it works and has the intended effect, and I agree that it's a good decision to put it out immediately so that the readers have a good idea of what to expect from this story.

Overall, the setting is established quickly enough and there are enough questions raised to keep the reader going, which is the point of a prologue, after all, so good job. I'd just like to suggest that you smooth out the transition when Noboru appears. This can be done just by changing the order of the sentence fragments; for example -

[Wryn revealed his teeth once more and took a hold of her hips.

Suddenly, a cold voice came from somewhere up and to the left of them.

"Sword of Darkness, Blade of Death..." etc.]

Also, it would probably help if you added a note explaining what 'Dourakusen' means.
bradpara chapter 1 . 12/29/2012
Intresting begining
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