Wow, creepy. Who was the man? I am assuming the boy was underage. Very well written. You are very talented.

good one. I enjoyed it it awakened so dark and Victorian London Roof top stuff. I have no idea if that was where you had intended it to be set.
it's funny how just a few words in the right place can set the scene and the period. This was cleverly set and could have taken place at any time but for the strategically placed period setters. plus of course you did say it was set in the 18TH century. That wouldn't' t have mattered though since it would work in any period. what you need to develop use now is whether or not it stands alone or whether you want to develop the characters and make a longer story out of it. It would certainly take a lot of thought and although if I know you you have . ton of notes to back your characters up.

DS

great first chapter!