Reviews for Inside, Out, and Back Again |
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KeriEW chapter 4 . 7/30/2013 Hey! I really like the idea for this story. Don't know if you abandoned it or not... but it's still really good. Something that would help me out when reading it is if you made a new paragraph when someone else started talking. Because it's kind of hard to sift through the conversations when they're all in one paragraph. You lose track of who's talking. Anyway, great job, and I hope you update soon! If not, I'll just have to hunt down something else :) |
ThisGirlIsOnFire chapter 3 . 3/17/2013 I like the plot, and the story itself is pretty well done. Just one thing- in the third chapter, second paragraph, you named the doodle people "Cade" and "Jaclyn". I'm not sure if it's supposed to be that way or not, but I thought maybe that it was a mistake and you meant Andrew instead of Cade, because it's in Andrew's point of view. Maybe you were still on Cade mode or something? Just a thought. Other than that, it's pretty good. I don't have a FP account but i'll try to keep tabs on this story, I really like it. Nice job. |
slowly-falling-angel chapter 2 . 1/2/2013 i have to say, his story is hilarious. :P |