|Reviews for Order of the True Faith|
| Teharakeke chapter 1 . 1/30/2013
Uh right, your writing is not bad, but I'm a bit confused as to what is happening. The first chapter is the most important in a story, here you fail to establish the plot, therefore you put off your readers. You probably need to make this longer, set the tone and the scene a bit better, then you should be right.