Reviews for ORCHID
Starart152 chapter 14 . 11/6/2022
This is a nice chapter that explained more what happened just outside of the music room and what Azure did when he visited Ophelia.
I am really satisfied by the blow of this chapter and how the characters interacted together.
Starart152 chapter 13 . 11/4/2022
It was fun to see the conversation between Azure and his friends. Ryan has a fun way of thinking about what Tsukiko might do on her own and it made me chuckled.
As for Nathaniel, he sure got a powerful slap if it was louder than Azure's cry.
Starart152 chapter 12 . 1/30/2022
This has a nice and short lore dump and world building when it comes to the power the characters has, the types of power and the form it might take to create them, as they are there to learn how to use it.

Except for Arctus to be the first one to master it, we learn that it is something difficult to do, but important for soldiers, in situations where they don't have a weapon.
Starart152 chapter 11 . 1/29/2022
This is a nice chapter that set up for the next big event of the plot. We also know the main objective of Macbeth and the others. The one they have for now. It is uncertain if this will remain their plan until the end of the story, or someone else has another plan for something bigger.
Starart152 chapter 10 . 6/6/2021
This is a nice chapter for this story. Azure and Tsukiko tension are still high in the air as the boy confronted her. She didn't like it at all.
As for the ending, it was a nice cliffhanger as a an assassination happened.

I wonder what will happen later on in the story.
Starart152 chapter 9 . 1/17/2021
This is a nice chapter with a lot of characters introduce in the academy. We can see some of his friends and one potential rival with Nathaniel who had a lot of advantage over Azure. The characters introduction is interesting and I wonder what will go on.

I wonder what will happen in the academy as the story progress and how the battle would go on in the story.
Starart152 chapter 8 . 1/16/2021
This is a nice chapter were little happens, but we know a little more about Azure as he prepared to go to the school.
Azure got a warning about searching for his parents. I do wonder what the headmaster meant by searching about something that doesn't exist.
I do wonder who are the new characters that will be introduced.
Starart152 chapter 7 . 4/5/2020
This is a nice chapter foreshadowing something big that would happen soon in the palace, but also more globally in the story. The role of Azure in the story is still uncertain, but we know what his father plans for him.

As for the story so far, the writing is nicely done and the characters are interesting. It makes me curious about what might happen next.
Starart152 chapter 6 . 4/4/2020
This is a nice chapter that shows a little about the struggles that Azure would face as he has to find out about his future. Since he wants to make his own decisions, it's clear that he isn't that interested in the company and wants to take another path. As for Tsukiko, her role is still yet unclear about what she is doing in his house, but it seems like to the terrorist actions.
Starart152 chapter 5 . 11/24/2019
This is a nice chapter where Azure gave short visit to his friend while the mystery of Tsukiko intensified.
As for the demands of the terrorist who attacked, I have little idea of its true agenda. It does seems that what they want is okay on the surface but their methods might indicate that there is something more sinister that is left unsaid.
Starart152 chapter 4 . 11/23/2019
This is a nice chapter that introduce Tsukiko but we know nothing of her so far. As for Azure, I hope for him that what happened to Ophelia isn't that grave.

I really like how the characters interact together in this chapter and how Azure acts and reacts to the other characters.
dmasterxd chapter 1 . 10/8/2017
Your description is really great, I'm jealous haha. Also I really like Azure's and Mimi's interactions already. And there seems to be some racism going on here. Not much else to say since it's only the first chapter but good job so far.
Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 7 . 4/9/2017
Wow...Tsukiko is...just nasty. If someone goes through my things and reads my stuff like that, I would have booted her out of my room. I don't care about living under the same room, you still have to maintain a modicum of privacy and respect. If you can't follow those rules, you can leave my room.

Seems like others have doubts about Edmond's decision to put poor Azure on the throne of his company. Well, he sounds political and stuff and we shall see what sort of plans will unfold in the future.
Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 6 . 4/8/2017 pressures. We all experience them at some point or another.

See? Even Azure picked out the hypocrisy of RAIN. I'm with him on this, exceept that I find Azure hypocritical too. I know you're trying to be funny with Tsukuko, but really, if someone comes into my room and basically vandalizes it (yes, that's what Tsukiko did), I'll be annoyed. On a plus side, Samuel is awesome as hell. He sort of reminds me of Alfred the butler, with that British humor of his.

On the other hand, the interrogation scene went...unnaturally. I'm not sure if you know how interrogations work, but Mercutio spouting off such lines just made him sound cheesy instead of being sophisticated. And normally Albert would have smashed his face into the table to shut him up, but instead he lets the guy ramble on (I would have done it). In addition, would an interrogator shout his name and rank in response to provocation? "Do you know who I am? I am Major Albert blah blah..." No, really? Normally, you would either hit the guy (if you're talking about the illegal methods) or you'll ignore him and face him in stony silence. I'm sure interrogators are trained on how to deal with interrogations properly and not to rise to the other guy's provocations.

Well, we'll see what happens to Azure soon. By the way, I found it funny that you were posting about how to introduce and clearly distinguish/portray characters in the writing guide/forum but you didn't actually clarify that Azure was of European descent and had that scene imply that he was Indian (which was far from your goal of clearly portraying characters without ambiguity). I kind of feel you though, because I make similiar embarrassing mistakes.
Tomoyuki Tanaka chapter 5 . 4/8/2017
Poor Ophelia. At least she's all right.

Both Azure and Tsukiko are acting like jerks, with one being self-entitled and demanding answers and Tsukiko being deliberately uncooperative, coy and provocative. I suspect that was your intention, for them to be hostile to each other, have sparks fly between their meeting, and then slowly warm up to each other. But still, wow...yelling like that? Azure seems like a self-righteous, arrogant hypocrite to me. But that's just me.

At least I finally get the purpose of RAIN, but I find it ludicrious that they're demanding democracy while blowing up buildings and trying to hurt people. I'm not sure if democracy is supposed to be that violent. Then again, such actions have basis in history, so that's not a critique of your story, I just find it hypocritical, even in real life.
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